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Waiting For You To Call (vulgar language) (Free verse) by PK I thought that I was special
I thought that we were true
I thought that I meant something
But now I'm just so fucking blue
You fucking said
That you would call
You fucking made
Me feel so small
You're sitting now
Laughing so fucking proud
While i'm sitting here
Waiting so fucking loud
I scream from within
From the pain you cause
I hide from without
From the love I've aloud
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constructed word poem #6
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Posted: August 16, 2002 12:19 PM PDT; Last modified: August 16, 2002 12:19 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.5965877 Overall Rank: 12540 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159
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16-Aug-02/12:45 PM
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This poeme contains so many instances of the word 'fucking' that it actually pulls itself back from the precipice of adolescent turmoil. I especially like the second verse. I do not like the third and fourth verses, though. Consider replacing them with 'You stupid fucking bitch/You fucking, fucking bitch/You fucking fucking fucking fucking/fucking fucking bitch.
d.a's got a point i say replace the word "that" with cunt, the term "I" with "the shank of maggotry" and the with "fish monger". great. thanks. may a rock from outer space fix your problems. and mine too. soon
You're really vulgar. Makes me sick just reviewing your so called poem. You're an insult to the English language.
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