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Waiting For You To Call (vulgar language) (Free verse) by PK
I thought that I was special I thought that we were true I thought that I meant something But now I'm just so fucking blue You fucking said That you would call You fucking made Me feel so small You're sitting now Laughing so fucking proud While i'm sitting here Waiting so fucking loud I scream from within From the pain you cause I hide from without From the love I've aloud

Up the ladder: constructed word poem #6

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.5965877
Overall Rank: 12535
Posted: August 16, 2002 12:19 PM PDT; Last modified: August 16, 2002 12:19 PM PDT
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 16-Aug-02/12:45 PM | Reply
This poeme contains so many instances of the word 'fucking' that it actually pulls itself back from the precipice of adolescent turmoil. I especially like the second verse. I do not like the third and fourth verses, though. Consider replacing them with 'You stupid fucking bitch/You fucking, fucking bitch/You fucking fucking fucking fucking/fucking fucking bitch.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Aug-02/9:49 PM | Reply
d.a's got a point i say replace the word "that" with cunt, the term "I" with "the shank of maggotry" and the with "fish monger". great. thanks. may a rock from outer space fix your problems. and mine too. soon
[0] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 | 13-Dec-05/8:46 PM | Reply
You're really vulgar. Makes me sick just reviewing your so called poem. You're an insult to the English language.
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