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Waiting For You To Call (vulgar language) (Free verse) by PK

I thought that I was special I thought that we were true I thought that I meant something But now I'm just so fucking blue You fucking said That you would call You fucking made Me feel so small You're sitting now Laughing so fucking proud While i'm sitting here Waiting so fucking loud I scream from within From the pain you cause I hide from without From the love I've aloud

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 16-Aug-02/12:45 PM
This poeme contains so many instances of the word 'fucking' that it actually pulls itself back from the precipice of adolescent turmoil. I especially like the second verse. I do not like the third and fourth verses, though. Consider replacing them with 'You stupid fucking bitch/You fucking, fucking bitch/You fucking fucking fucking fucking/fucking fucking bitch.




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