Free verse № 81742
Kernel of truth
Itâs the force of pressure
Makes her escape.
To seek freedom
To burn,
Like a husk
Before embers.
She melts in the flow
of pure enjoyment
submerged in it,
Like a handmaiden of power:
an accidental desire,
breaking down ideas
ruled by none
save creation
to grasp herself
from the observer.
Should you bind her
without question
she will buck and kick,
Like a mare
In confinement
Of a cell she cannot see.
She knew what to decline
There is no prison
In her core:
She is free
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seriously though, while this is written fine
with no serious problems
i just didn't feel anything
your word choice is a bit boring
as are your imagery
and i don't know that you really have anything to say here
go troll someone else you no-talent ass clown
The part from "bind her" to "cannot see" is the poem's best, but needs different punctuation.
I deleted your two (by editing, not maliciously) from my last post. You can go redo it if you want. I'd be really happy if you made a comment while you were at it.
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