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Kernel of truth (Free verse) by annabellee
Itâs the force of pressure
Makes her escape.
To seek freedom
To burn,
Like a husk
Before embers.
She melts in the flow
of pure enjoyment
submerged in it,
Like a handmaiden of power:
an accidental desire,
breaking down ideas
ruled by none
save creation
to grasp herself
from the observer.
Should you bind her
without question
she will buck and kick,
Like a mare
In confinement
Of a cell she cannot see.
She knew what to decline
There is no prison
In her core:
She is free
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.857143
Weighted score: 5.230521
Overall Rank: 4240
Posted: January 27, 2004 11:11 AM PST; Last modified: January 27, 2004 11:11 AM PST
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seriously though, while this is written fine
with no serious problems
i just didn't feel anything
your word choice is a bit boring
as are your imagery
and i don't know that you really have anything to say here
go troll someone else you no-talent ass clown