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Kernel of truth (Free verse) by annabellee

It’s the force of pressure Makes her escape. To seek freedom To burn, Like a husk Before embers. She melts in the flow of pure enjoyment submerged in it, Like a handmaiden of power: an accidental desire, breaking down ideas ruled by none save creation to grasp herself from the observer. Should you bind her without question she will buck and kick, Like a mare In confinement Of a cell she cannot see. She knew what to decline There is no prison In her core: She is free

andrewjthomas 27-Jan-04/12:23 PM
husk??? where's Dark Angel when you need him?
seriously though, while this is written fine
with no serious problems
i just didn't feel anything
your word choice is a bit boring
as are your imagery
and i don't know that you really have anything to say here




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