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Me, myself and I. (Free verse) by darby pyn The unexpected mind is open for surprises.
lean forward, bend the grip of sanity to focus on the invisible reward.
feel the rigid grip loosen like discarded chewing gum.
used and without flavor. be prepared for lifeâs tests.
itâs an open wound, a reminder of my frailty.
Iâm the enemy my mother warned me about.
Up the ladder:
Ode to the Wolf
Down the ladder:
Exclamatory Abuse
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Posted: December 15, 2003 11:03 AM PST; Last modified: December 15, 2003 11:03 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.4034123 Overall Rank: 3139 Comments:
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Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.116.54
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15-Dec-03/12:23 PM
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That's lesson 1. Second grades over there --->
Well, I liked it.
I learned this one when i was five. Blessed with 9.
Whenever i read -Blessed with a *- i want to blessed well do some blessed damage to the blessed meek and mild and blessed small furry blessing animals. Its so blessedly cack curdelingly blessed twee.
Blarb gluu glaa glaa? Bless you.
When I'm giving a score, don't read the comment then? And what meek and mild "furry" animals are you talking about? DO I LOOK LIKE A PINKBUNNYRABBIT??? NO. I'm a fucking heretic disguised as a priest, and I'm leading the furry meek folks into oblivion. Ok? So stop fucking with my master plans and scram? And no, I cannot hear confession for random cruel acts against animals- so do not bother me with such hogwash spewed from your ill-shapen hairy lips.
Hey there?
Yep i guess you right dude? I'm sorry i guess i was just a little cranky the other day? Its just, ye know, i can't actually avoid reading your closing sentence and score cause, well it keeps coming up quite frequently, and although i don't visit as much as i used to it always seems to appear somewhere in the recent comments section? Maybe you could come up with another closing sentence and alternate the two? I think i've got one that would keep the REAL ESSENCE of the original whilst proving different enough to show that you've really branched out? How about? I'm sooooooooooooooooo gay 8 Of course you wouldn't have to use 8 at the end that's just an example!? You could of course use a 4 or a 9 or a 2 or indeed any other number!!????!! Don't feel tied down? I'll leave it upto your discretion?
I spend time being original with my poetry.. my voting line? can grow old and dusty, I couldn't give a shit.
Plus anyway, I make other interesting "original" and creative comments all over the place. Haven't you heard? I'm the commentary clown with ONE overused "blessed with blur blah" line, with a thousand personalities spinning through the keyboard at the same time? Or perhaps you don't know about my other escapades.. but whatever. 190 view(s)
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