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Me, myself and I. (Free verse) by darby pyn

The unexpected mind is open for surprises. lean forward, bend the grip of sanity to focus on the invisible reward. feel the rigid grip loosen like discarded chewing gum. used and without flavor. be prepared for life’s tests. it’s an open wound, a reminder of my frailty. I’m the enemy my mother warned me about.

==Doylum 17-Dec-03/8:29 AM
Hey there?
Yep i guess you right dude? I'm sorry i guess i was just a little cranky the other day? Its just, ye know, i can't actually avoid reading your closing sentence and score cause, well it keeps coming up quite frequently, and although i don't visit as much as i used to it always seems to appear somewhere in the recent comments section? Maybe you could come up with another closing sentence and alternate the two? I think i've got one that would keep the REAL ESSENCE of the original whilst proving different enough to show that you've really branched out? How about?

I'm sooooooooooooooooo gay 8

Of course you wouldn't have to use 8 at the end that's just an example!? You could of course use a 4 or a 9 or a 2 or indeed any other number!!????!! Don't feel tied down? I'll leave it upto your discretion?




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