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Things Are Going to be Different Next Year (Lyric) by JanieDoe She walked down the hall
Of empty billboards and yellowing walls
Silently observing
Vacant locker doors ajar
Swinging in the still air unmarred
Cleaned out
Sheets of schoolwork
Floating like the gloating smirk
Of the last word
They have moved on
Flew past twelfth grade, then gone
Onto college
Up the ladder:
Rain
Down the ladder:
A Dream Awakened
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Posted: July 30, 2002 4:34 PM PDT; Last modified: July 30, 2002 4:34 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0476813 Overall Rank: 6828 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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30-Jul-02/5:11 PM
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go back to twelth grade quick. your creative writing teacher might still be there...waiting...read.more.hemingway and less hello-kittay.nitros turbo fork.e
okay..this once..only cuz twelve comes after eleven and cubed it equals quite alot. well i imagine more than a few. math never lies, but i doa
What? you don'think i relax...you don't think i appreciate a good oatmeal avacado mask..i live in hollywood for christsake..you can't trip without falling on a sushi-wonder spa..sounds like you really want plains of africa part (6) sweating, and heaving within your comment squares..yes..yes..i believe you have earned it..oh 13th grader..who has left things behind..it is almost time to stretch...??
fictional. as is the space between your ears. but if there were such places i'm sure that they would have a strict dress code and caste system not to mention big bull dykes waiting at the door to push you back into the streets and behind a freshly painted dumpster..to train your carpet. to wrinkle your skirt. but for a mere 6,000 dollars a year you can be shuttled in from any location and pampered like a princess. Who knows..take the idea and build one in your back yard..and don't worry i found part 5 at about 12:45 today.it's all good .thanks.toodle lous a
=D ur comments make me smile every time. amusing how persistent some ppl are at critisizing (sp?) ur poetry when u havent even glanced at theirs. im sure ur a top notch writer minus the ego. im off to watch hk movies now! ttyl.
o yea and be sure to check out this song. great stress reliever: Jay Chow -kai bu liao kou
an impressive picture.write in the same vain.hope you success.
an impressive picture.write in the same vein.hope you success.
How can something swing along in the still air?
Huh...I like the ending. I think "smirk" is weak, you shouldn't try so hard to rhyme. Your message is interesting enough.
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