Things Are Going to be Different Next Year

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Jul 2002 · 12 comments

She walked down the hall Of empty billboards and yellowing walls Silently observing Vacant locker doors ajar Swinging in the still air unmarred Cleaned out Sheets of schoolwork Floating like the gloating smirk Of the last word They have moved on Flew past twelfth grade, then gone Onto college

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[7] horus8 30-Jul-02/5:11 PM Reply

go back to twelth grade quick. your creative writing teacher might still be there...waiting...read.more.hemingway and less hello-kittay.nitros turbo fork.e

[n/a] JanieDoe 1-Aug-02/12:31 AM Reply

i just graduated. gimme a break. and i hate hemingway..guhhhh

[7] horus8 1-Aug-02/1:17 AM Reply

okay..this once..only cuz twelve comes after eleven and cubed it equals quite alot. well i imagine more than a few. math never lies, but i doa

[n/a] JanieDoe 1-Aug-02/11:17 AM Reply

hehe you're funny. but it sounds like u have alot of built up stress. go watch Legally Blonde and try a facemask and massage. i'm getting one tomorrow =D

[7] horus8 1-Aug-02/12:47 PM Reply

What? you don'think i relax...you don't think i appreciate a good oatmeal avacado mask..i live in hollywood for christsake..you can't trip without falling on a sushi-wonder spa..sounds like you really want plains of africa part (6) sweating, and heaving within your comment squares..yes..yes..i believe you have earned it..oh 13th grader..who has left things behind..it is almost time to stretch...??

[n/a] JanieDoe 1-Aug-02/4:46 PM Reply

u can give me all the plains on that continent if u want. i dont really read it. if u want ur comments to make an impact u should keep them short and sweet. and sushi-wonder spas? hm... please tell me more about that, im interested.

[7] horus8 1-Aug-02/5:06 PM Reply

fictional. as is the space between your ears. but if there were such places i'm sure that they would have a strict dress code and caste system not to mention big bull dykes waiting at the door to push you back into the streets and behind a freshly painted dumpster..to train your carpet. to wrinkle your skirt. but for a mere 6,000 dollars a year you can be shuttled in from any location and pampered like a princess. Who knows..take the idea and build one in your back yard..and don't worry i found part 5 at about 12:45 today.it's all good .thanks.toodle lous a

[n/a] JanieDoe 1-Aug-02/7:04 PM Reply

=D ur comments make me smile every time. amusing how persistent some ppl are at critisizing (sp?) ur poetry when u havent even glanced at theirs. im sure ur a top notch writer minus the ego. im off to watch hk movies now! ttyl.
o yea and be sure to check out this song. great stress reliever: Jay Chow -kai bu liao kou

[n/a] vulcan 29-Aug-02/7:37 AM Reply

an impressive picture.write in the same vain.hope you success.

[n/a] vulcan 29-Aug-02/7:38 AM Reply

an impressive picture.write in the same vein.hope you success.

[5] poetandknowit 1-Sep-02/12:20 PM Reply

How can something swing along in the still air?

[6] Plaidypus 22-Dec-03/10:22 PM Reply

Huh...I like the ending. I think "smirk" is weak, you shouldn't try so hard to rhyme. Your message is interesting enough.