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Me and the Darkness

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Jul 2002 · 4 comments

I sit here in the darkness And watch life fade away My soul aches And soon breaks away. I feel like i'm in the underworld Deep, deep, down I'm alone except for the souls Of those who are gone. I sit here in the darkness And know nothing is right No matter how hard we fight Nothing will ever be right. I know my life will fade away One sad and mournful day Yes, on that mournful day My life truly has faded away. Into the darkness i will go Never to return, always alone.

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[7] horus8 23-Jul-02/7:09 PM Reply

i seriously doubt that, try zanex, dildo's, and les miserables w/ a little jane's addiction

[3] pete 28-Jul-02/4:53 PM Reply

..... still , mustn't grumble eh ! ... the old human condition doncha know ... :-)

[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Jul-02/5:03 PM Reply

I don't think this is a very good poeme. I especially like the fourth verse, in which you could only think of two lines so you just repeated them to make it four. Moreover, the whole piece is an utterly ridiculous attempt to appear 'deep' and 'troubled'. It's just a vague, teenage rambling about 'darkness'. No matter how hard you try, any poeme that tries to be 'dark' by using the word 'darkness' will fail. You fail.

[7] Tarquin De La Bog 19-Aug-02/6:44 PM Reply

Depressing. 7. Keep taking those tablets; whatever, you do, don't forget. This is miserable stuff. If you were trying to be bleak and dark, congratulations. Not the thing to read if one needs cheering up.