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Me and the Darkness (Free verse) by aurora I sit here in the darkness
And watch life fade away
My soul aches
And soon breaks away.
I feel like i'm in the underworld
Deep, deep, down
I'm alone except for the souls
Of those who are gone.
I sit here in the darkness
And know nothing is right
No matter how hard we fight
Nothing will ever be right.
I know my life will fade away
One sad and mournful day
Yes, on that mournful day
My life truly has faded away.
Into the darkness i will go
Never to return, always alone.
Up the ladder:
fastbreaker
Down the ladder:
Thinkin of ya!
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Posted: July 23, 2002 6:15 PM PDT; Last modified: July 23, 2002 6:15 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.4957347 Overall Rank: 12828 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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23-Jul-02/7:09 PM
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i seriously doubt that, try zanex, dildo's, and les miserables w/ a little jane's addiction
..... still , mustn't grumble eh ! ... the old human condition doncha know ... :-)
I don't think this is a very good poeme. I especially like the fourth verse, in which you could only think of two lines so you just repeated them to make it four. Moreover, the whole piece is an utterly ridiculous attempt to appear 'deep' and 'troubled'. It's just a vague, teenage rambling about 'darkness'. No matter how hard you try, any poeme that tries to be 'dark' by using the word 'darkness' will fail. You fail.
Depressing. 7. Keep taking those tablets; whatever, you do, don't forget. This is miserable stuff. If you were trying to be bleak and dark, congratulations. Not the thing to read if one needs cheering up.
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