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Fire (a haiku series) (Haiku) by eviltwin Sparks spiral upward
Burning a dance on the night
Cousins to the stars
Hypnotic dancers
Twine in sinuous rhythms
Bright flames sway and die
Coals glow on gray ash
A fierce dragon-belly red
Start to dim and fade
Up the ladder:
Whisper Under the Thunder
Down the ladder:
My Life as a Book
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Posted: July 23, 2002 4:11 PM PDT; Last modified: July 23, 2002 4:11 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.888889 Overall Rank: 1481 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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23-Jul-02/5:55 PM
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I'm not much of a haiku evalu-ater, but i likes this one. i likes mines rawwwww....a
I like the progression. I think historically haiku were supposed to be twinned with renga's to do something like this. (or something like that -- what do I know? :) I do like this.
excellent.
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