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This guy (Free verse) by Jai Your so cute
your so nice
your so polite
your just to good to be true
your taken
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Posted: June 10, 2003 4:33 PM PDT; Last modified: June 10, 2003 4:33 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.6821256 Overall Rank: 12140 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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11-Jun-03/11:43 AM
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You are, not your. Idiot.
it should be "you're" a contraction for "you are" not "your" which is a possessive pronoun.
after that, try some more substance, more specific details, images, etc. click on "best" at the top and read through those. you can learn a lot here.
a rather boring poem with a generic point... not to mention that it's "you're," not "your." there's nothing wrong with a short, cute poem; just give it more distinction and more impact.
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