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Carpet threading the sky (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
Rigormortised feet makes one inhale the stench of sterility and the progressive regression of technology. A house made of ticky-tacky. Dip the lower eschelons and sip the friendly motion then load for bear the Praetorian compassion. Now leave.

Up the ladder: I hope not
Down the ladder: Tomorrow

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1666665
Weighted score: 5.313765
Overall Rank: 3532
Posted: June 5, 2003 7:16 AM PDT; Last modified: June 5, 2003 7:16 AM PDT
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[9] scitz @ 62.105.88.10 | 5-Jun-03/8:05 AM | Reply
09
and yes eschelons fits like a milliners hat. Well done its a daisy.
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Jun-03/10:27 AM | Reply
Ha!
[8] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 5-Jun-03/11:08 AM | Reply
First half excellent. Second half confusing. Then again, I'm the idiot that wrote "soothing blisters of synthesis
walk on alkaline locks", so I have no right to say such things! I must be punished.
The title is a ten. I give the body seven. That averages out to 8.5!

Rock on.

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