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Carpet threading the sky (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Rigormortised feet makes one inhale the stench of sterility and the progressive regression of technology. A house made of ticky-tacky. Dip the lower eschelons and sip the friendly motion then load for bear the Praetorian compassion. Now leave.

Bill Z Bub 5-Jun-03/11:08 AM
First half excellent. Second half confusing. Then again, I'm the idiot that wrote "soothing blisters of synthesis
walk on alkaline locks", so I have no right to say such things! I must be punished.
The title is a ten. I give the body seven. That averages out to 8.5!

Rock on.





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