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Ugly (Free verse) by openwounds the beautiful pine trees.
covered with frozen water.
taking away from their beauty.
breathing hard, running fast.
the children can see their breath.
they don't see the hidden beauty.
they see their whole lives.
in front of them.
naive.
Up the ladder:
Truckers should not be poets
Down the ladder:
Distant at best
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Posted: March 23, 2003 9:40 PM PST; Last modified: March 23, 2003 9:40 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.166884 Overall Rank: 4992 Comments:
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37
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23-Mar-03/11:58 PM
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Wow! Quick style change. I was looking forward to more gore. Or angst. -7-
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openwounds @ 205.188.209.77
> thepinkbunnyofdoom
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24-Mar-03/12:00 AM
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Don't worry - there will be plenty more gore to come .. I can't refrain from writing of those things for long.
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37
> openwounds
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24-Mar-03/12:29 AM
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Who really can?
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openwounds @ 205.188.209.77
> thepinkbunnyofdoom
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24-Mar-03/12:48 AM
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That would be Blindproject - he/she has lived quite a cookie cutter life and can't really understand - or appreciate - poetry that leans towards the darker side.
ooh.........this is so good
i love it.......10! -megan 130 view(s)
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