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eat a grape please (Free verse) by skaskowski solid black marker
on the desk
next to my keyboard
Permanent.
And a game
controller
and a mouse
and games.
how i want to play them.
okay.
Am i in?
Yes.
One more episode
And it is being set up.
But i must urinate first.
I must piss first.
Up the ladder:
haunter of the dark
Down the ladder:
Blade
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.125
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.1257973 Overall Rank: 13295 Comments:
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14-Jul-01/3:34 PM
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I enjoy realism in poetry. Poems written in the moment!
Next to his keyboard: Crack rocks. Crack rocks the size of his HEAD.
utter crap
There's something cracked about this I like.
sounds like my house on a Friday night ten years ago, getting on line and playing until dawn.
sounds like my house on a Friday night ten years ago, getting on line and playing until dawn.
Turn off star trek episode 17. and slowly back away from the TVset, and no matter how much you beg I'm not giving you any more Amphetamines.
C'mon horus, give him a little more.It might be funny.
This poem means absoutly nothing! And what's up with repeating everything(almost everything)twice? : how does this sound: But i must pee first.I must piss first? To me that sounds stupid repeating everythin tiwce. To me it sounds like he wrote this poem while he was in the restroom taking a piss!( Oh yea and one more thing star-trek wannabe dont miss the toilet when ur in the potty!
To me it sound stupid and means nothing! And what's up with this repeating everything(almost everything) twice? take a look at the last 2 lines of the poem they both mean the same thig except one is slang for the other! To me it sounds like he wrote this while he was taking a piss! Oh yea and one more thing star-trek wannabe dont miss thr toilet when ur doing ur business ok?
To me it sound stupid and means nothing! And what's up with this repeating everything(almost everything) twice? take a look at the last 2 lines of the poem they both mean the same thig except one is slang for the other! To me it sounds like he wrote this while he was taking a piss! Oh yea and one more thing star-trek wannabe dont miss thr toilet when ur doing ur business ok? we dont want anything getting on the floor!
To me it sound stupid and means nothing! And what's up with this repeating everything(almost everything) twice? take a look at the last 2 lines of the poem they both mean the same thig except one is slang for the other! To me it sounds like he wrote this while he was taking a piss! Oh yea and one more thing star-trek wannabe dont miss thr toilet when ur doing ur business ok? we dont want anything getting on the floor! because then ur gonna have to write a poem about that too!
To me it sound stupid and means nothing! And what's up with this repeating everything(almost everything) twice? take a look at the last 2 lines of the poem they both mean the same thig except one is slang for the other! To me it sounds like he wrote this while he was taking a piss! Oh yea and one more thing star-trek wannabe dont miss thr toilet when ur doing ur business ok? we dont want anything getting on the floor! because then ur gonna have to write a poem about that too!
Oh my god did i enter the same thing more than once? Maybe because it sounds like the LAST 2 LINES OF THE POEM?
I think the most constructive comment I am able to muster is simply thus: Occasionally you should consider leaving your room. Shambolic. 2/10, and that is considering that I am feeling particularly generous on this night.
dude, just give up
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