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"The Buick", or, "to my grandfather" (Free verse) by david He sits in the chair, the
one that i hate. Smoking
his cigarette, he
seems to me like an idling
Buick.
He raised an enormous
hand to draw my
attention to his words, to
his witty snaps about
life, the chinese,
and how wild it was
during the war.
Up the ladder:
save it from the age
Down the ladder:
Wednesday's Breaking
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Posted: May 11, 2002 11:41 AM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 11:41 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.1029806 Overall Rank: 1128 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @
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11-May-02/1:35 PM
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Why do you hate the chair? Does it smell? Experiment.
Dark Angel has poem envy. Pay no attention to him/her/it. It's a good poem, and the first line and a half is the best line in it probably.
I'm not a catholic, but I'm pretty sure "Buick" isn't slang for penis.
this is the beginning of a classic for christs saKE FINISH the damn thing.. please. i'm interested now don't leave me hangingl
This is what free verse should be. There's a story that is being told by the images rather than exposited by the narrator, there are emotions being conveyed rather than explained, and there is a certain trust in the readers that they should determine for themselves if there are lessons, values or judgements to be made from the scene.
I go along with Joshua partly. After the last two lines, especially because of those last lines, I'm left a bit unsatisfied. Although I realise the War itself isn't so relevant. And why change from present to past? It doesn't look too wrong, I simply wonder why.
Tremendously flattering comments. Thank you.
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