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"The Buick", or, "to my grandfather" (Free verse) by david

He sits in the chair, the one that i hate. Smoking his cigarette, he seems to me like an idling Buick. He raised an enormous hand to draw my attention to his words, to his witty snaps about life, the chinese, and how wild it was during the war.

DoubleU 19-Jun-05/2:29 PM
I go along with Joshua partly. After the last two lines, especially because of those last lines, I'm left a bit unsatisfied. Although I realise the War itself isn't so relevant. And why change from present to past? It doesn't look too wrong, I simply wonder why.




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