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Unwanted Return

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Sep 2002 · 7 comments

Is that you out there? Surely you wouldn't dare. After everything you did to me, Did you think I'd just let it be? I don't know what you want me to do, But I know I can't forgive you. I truly thought you were the one, But now I know to think that was dumb. I'd never felt a hurt before, Like I did when you walked out the door. And now you're trying to come back in? Well, I won't make that mistake again.

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7 comments

[5] deleted user 11-Sep-02/1:21 AM Reply

Good, but the rhymes seem a bit forced. Might do better as freeform or in another, less common rhyme scheme.

[3] poetandknowit 11-Sep-02/9:38 PM Reply

I swear I read this the first time when it was called Waking Up. Why don't you just make the one poem? Or maybe that wasn't what it was called, but it was another angry rant. Doesn't feeling hurt suck? Man, dude I feel it. Freakin women. Don't call her though!! Don't!!

[7] <~> › poetandknowit 11-Sep-02/9:43 PM Reply

not all of us play at that. but i agree with p&k--leave her be. wash her away, and watch out for her clones.

[8] royalflesh 11-Sep-02/9:41 PM Reply

essence of relationships. Well put. Well deserved 8/10

[5] horus8 19-Sep-02/11:52 PM Reply

i wont read this again. ever.

[3] -=SeTTle=- 3-Jan-03/5:31 PM Reply

This is aweful - not awesome.r

[8] Bachus 12-Jan-03/1:27 PM Reply

add two lines and this would be a sonnet, maybe it already is??