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Round 27 (Free verse) by Dovina
In a nation where war backfires and trust in naves erodes, a viral infection permeates the collective mind, emitting technological devices, erecting a paling of standard excuses.

Up the ladder: Zombie Love
Down the ladder: Torment From The Undead

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7790
Posted: January 26, 2006 10:34 AM PST; Last modified: January 26, 2006 10:34 AM PST
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[7] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 26-Jan-06/11:55 AM | Reply
Double meaning of "naves" here is clever. What do you mean by a "paling of standard excuses" (it's the "erecting a paling" that's throwing me off)? I don't get the title.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ecargo | 26-Jan-06/1:46 PM | Reply
Thanks for the comment. The title is merely angst at how many times it takes in the boxing ring for a country to get it. Nothing special about the number 27.

The “paling” bit could be rewritten for clarity: “a viral infection permeates the collective mind, emitting technological devices, and erecting for itself a fence of sharp sticks, pointed upward, which serve as a neat collection of standard excuses against anyone who objects.”
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > ecargo | 26-Jan-06/7:27 PM | Reply
What 2 meanings of nave do you mean?
[7] ecargo @ 172.129.117.88 > ALChemy | 26-Jan-06/7:41 PM | Reply
Well, I took it for a reference to church naves and to "knaves."
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ecargo | 26-Jan-06/8:00 PM | Reply
and hubs of wheels.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > Dovina | 27-Jan-06/5:09 AM | Reply
Well how nave of me.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ALChemy | 28-Jan-06/9:22 AM | Reply
You seem neither the interior of a church nor the hub of a wheel, and if you mean knave, well, not that either.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > Dovina | 28-Jan-06/10:10 AM | Reply
There's a glitch at dictionary.com were if you type "nave" and hit the search button the definition for "naive" sometimes pops up. Sometimes you have to do it a few times for it to work.

So it was kinda my own little private joke.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ALChemy | 28-Jan-06/10:44 AM | Reply
I tried that, and it worked alright. I guess your computer is fraught with glitchism. I prefer http://www.onelook.com/?loc=rz4&;w=*ism&scwo=1&sswo=1 for its many options and various dictionaries. And you can enter something like *ism and get all the words ending in "ism", more isms than michael_d cares to think about.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 | 26-Jan-06/7:33 PM | Reply
Smart sounding words.
Sounds mostly like an excerpt from a sociology book.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ALChemy | 26-Jan-06/7:59 PM | Reply
Then you voted too high.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > Dovina | 27-Jan-06/5:09 AM | Reply
Eight is enough.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > ALChemy | 27-Jan-06/5:12 AM | Reply
Well I was going to give you two 4s but I still haven't figured out how that trick is done.
[5] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 | 26-Jan-06/7:42 PM | Reply
I don't get this one. It doesn't seem too clear to me about what you're trying to convey.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 | 27-Jan-06/5:14 AM | Reply
You should make this into something more. It needs bookends.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ALChemy | 27-Jan-06/11:01 AM | Reply
It needs something to bookend too. I was playing with words on this one, not trying to be deep or meaningful, frivolous really, and the bad thing - erodite.

4,4 - (sometime I'll let you in on a secret)
[n/a] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 28-Jan-06/12:19 PM | Reply
Not sure yet what to make of this one, I will have to ponder it further and return.
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