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Free verse № 135

i was

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 6 comments

i was fighting needles i was pierced by these you were not there to be my saving kiss, i rushed to touch your heart i was pulled by this and there you resided to steal my senses... i can live and breathe within you but i twist and break without you i need you heart to beat in time with mine, to be alive; i only see my life within you, outside i am but a crumbled shell i need your eyes to capture mine as time fades out with love's entrance... you hold me in a trance, you mezmerize me with that dance and i become your happiness as you become my newest sense; i love you as a ghost, i feel your spirit in this void, alive, i live beside you, i would die if left without you. i was fading mist i was lost in air you remained there, in me my saving light; i breathed in your embrace and i was real in this, for in embrace resided the silence of pain- and the birth of new feeling...

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6 comments

[3] anonymous 9-Sep-01/4:18 PM Reply
wonderful how it draws one in to feel the words and roll them over one's tongue...
[3] anonymous 23-Apr-02/9:28 PM Reply
Good, but I think "i need you heart to beat in time"
should be "i need your heart to beat in time."
[6] shwenatjadeflower 12-Jul-02/12:57 AM Reply
very sensual.
[10] horus8 9-Aug-02/11:19 PM Reply
it will never stop flipping back over on itself...flopping back over onto me.??
[8] Bachus 29-May-03/9:47 AM Reply
Bitch, are you cheating on me?
[10] travelingsk8er 28-Nov-04/5:50 PM Reply
WoW! its great