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i was (Free verse) by skaskowski
i was fighting needles i was pierced by these you were not there to be my saving kiss, i rushed to touch your heart i was pulled by this and there you resided to steal my senses... i can live and breathe within you but i twist and break without you i need you heart to beat in time with mine, to be alive; i only see my life within you, outside i am but a crumbled shell i need your eyes to capture mine as time fades out with love's entrance... you hold me in a trance, you mezmerize me with that dance and i become your happiness as you become my newest sense; i love you as a ghost, i feel your spirit in this void, alive, i live beside you, i would die if left without you. i was fading mist i was lost in air you remained there, in me my saving light; i breathed in your embrace and i was real in this, for in embrace resided the silence of pain- and the birth of new feeling...

Up the ladder: Toy Story
Down the ladder: Economics 499

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.7222223
Weighted score: 4.735396
Overall Rank: 11738
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:14 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:14 AM PST
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Comments:
[3]... anonymous @ | 9-Sep-01/4:18 PM | Reply
wonderful how it draws one in to feel the words and roll them over one's tongue...
[3]... anonymous @ | 23-Apr-02/9:28 PM | Reply
Good, but I think "i need you heart to beat in time"
should be "i need your heart to beat in time."
[6] shwenatjadeflower @ 68.12.149.5 | 12-Jul-02/12:57 AM | Reply
very sensual.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 9-Aug-02/11:19 PM | Reply
it will never stop flipping back over on itself...flopping back over onto me.??
[8] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-May-03/9:47 AM | Reply
Bitch, are you cheating on me?
[10] travelingsk8er @ 68.7.187.148 | 28-Nov-04/5:50 PM | Reply
WoW! its great
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