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Fair Dianne (Free verse) by Dovina Bricks fly,
pummeling those sheâs marked unkind.
Snarling teeth yank at entrails.
Look out for Fair Dianne
when her hair-trigger snaps.
Up the ladder:
Basic
Down the ladder:
Sweet Goodbye
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Posted: November 5, 2004 10:22 AM PST; Last modified: November 5, 2004 10:22 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.134471 Overall Rank: 5584 Comments:
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Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.205.252
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5-Nov-04/11:54 PM
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I heard someone say this once tonight already but I think it bears repeating. "It seems a tad short. Any chance you might stretch it a bit?"
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Dovina @ 69.175.6.101
> Dan garcia-Black
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6-Nov-04/6:31 AM
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Iâll say it one more time, please listen. It does seem a tad short, but youâd not like the outcome of a longer version.
Should be categorized "Barely Veiled Rant about Getting Your Poems Trashed on Poemranker". I'll be writing nentwined to have such a category created and all backlogged poems in this vein belatedly entered in it. You can be our queen.
It takes more than that to snap this trigger. Besides, your queen would prefer a paradelle to a pummeling, whereas I find them about the same.
I don't know what you mean. I was being serious :-(
This dog I've seen here likes to run into traffic. It must have been hit about a half-dozen times, is missing a leg, ear, and teeth, etc. I imagine it thinks life is this same steady and unstoppable string of pummellings for everybody. The other dogs, the ones who don't run in traffic, don't say anything - or it doesn't believe them when they do.
Dumb doggie. Guess it's in his nature.
I love people who say things are in their own or other people's natures. I could kiss you now.
It's so nice to be loved for my nature, and it happens so very often here on Poemranker that I tend to become inconsiderate. But please Mr. Z, you're a married man.
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