poemranker ::Dads are suppose to stay by Brandy_n_Cali

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Free verse № 110802

Dads are suppose to stay

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Aug 2004 · 8 comments

I used to call you daddy, once upon a day. But, you left me, dads are suppose to stay. Now your really gone, this time forever. You went where you will never get older. I had a chance to see you this time before you left. I chose not to. I hope without regret. I was mad at you, and I feel that I have that right. You let go of me without putting up a fight. I miss the dad that loved my Mother. I miss the dad that put his family before another. I miss the dad that wasn't skinny and sick. I miss the dad that never raised a hand. I miss the dad who took care of and supported his family like a man. I remember when I was young, you called me Dandy. That's the dad I miss, that's the dad that I regret not giving that last hug and kiss.

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8 comments

[6] Dovina 21-Aug-04/7:23 AM Reply
The thought is good, but the poem could use more of the devices that attract someone unfamiliar with you and your subject. I often say that the spirit of a poem is more important than it's form, but here form is lacking. You've got the hard part, the rest is easy.
[5] horus8 21-Aug-04/1:38 PM Reply
a tic turd on high whip.
[n/a] Brandy_n_Cali › horus8 21-Aug-04/7:51 PM Reply
im not quite sure what that means lol
[10] Dan garcia-Black 22-Aug-04/10:45 AM Reply
This is what I expect my kids will feel when I die. It's bearable, compared to having to live with their mother.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Dan garcia-Black 22-Aug-04/1:09 PM Reply
here here.
[10] Stephen Robins 23-Aug-04/7:08 AM Reply
Are you really 22 yrs old? Lord Jesu's benevolent ball sack!
[7] New Life Drug 23-Aug-04/6:18 PM Reply
i feel you
[10] AM I EVIL? 19-Sep-04/10:21 PM Reply
I REALLY LIKES THIS 1 EVERYTHING ABOUT IT IS HEARTFELT AND SOULFILLED