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Dads are suppose to stay (Free verse) by Brandy_n_Cali
I used to call you daddy, once upon a day. But, you left me, dads are suppose to stay. Now your really gone, this time forever. You went where you will never get older. I had a chance to see you this time before you left. I chose not to. I hope without regret. I was mad at you, and I feel that I have that right. You let go of me without putting up a fight. I miss the dad that loved my Mother. I miss the dad that put his family before another. I miss the dad that wasn't skinny and sick. I miss the dad that never raised a hand. I miss the dad who took care of and supported his family like a man. I remember when I was young, you called me Dandy. That's the dad I miss, that's the dad that I regret not giving that last hug and kiss.

Up the ladder: B r o t h e r
Down the ladder: thor an his hammer

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.4444447
Weighted score: 5.7222223
Overall Rank: 1887
Posted: August 20, 2004 3:38 PM PDT; Last modified: August 20, 2004 3:38 PM PDT
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Comments:
[6] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 21-Aug-04/7:23 AM | Reply
The thought is good, but the poem could use more of the devices that attract someone unfamiliar with you and your subject. I often say that the spirit of a poem is more important than it's form, but here form is lacking. You've got the hard part, the rest is easy.
[5] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 | 21-Aug-04/1:38 PM | Reply
a tic turd on high whip.
[n/a] Brandy_n_Cali @ 4.182.249.147 > horus8 | 21-Aug-04/7:51 PM | Reply
im not quite sure what that means lol
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.19 | 22-Aug-04/10:45 AM | Reply
This is what I expect my kids will feel when I die. It's bearable, compared to having to live with their mother.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.130.62.63 > Dan garcia-Black | 22-Aug-04/1:09 PM | Reply
here here.
[10] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 23-Aug-04/7:08 AM | Reply
Are you really 22 yrs old? Lord Jesu's benevolent ball sack!
[7] New Life Drug @ 69.106.227.126 | 23-Aug-04/6:18 PM | Reply
i feel you
[10] AM I EVIL? @ 24.71.61.94 | 19-Sep-04/10:21 PM | Reply
I REALLY LIKES THIS 1 EVERYTHING ABOUT IT IS HEARTFELT AND SOULFILLED
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