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Why...? (Free verse) by muffielouise Standing at the waters edge
I feel the energy flow threw my body
Getting ready to ride
It is like the vib of music
Flowing threw my ears
The anticipation of waiting for a good wave
Is exzhilerating
I know it will come
'I have to wait'
Boarding down the face
As it dies out
And I am thrown off
By the power of the rip curl
My board is snaped in half
It feels as if someone just broke my heart
I want crumble to pieces
Because I just lost my passion
Up the ladder:
thor an his hammer
Down the ladder:
Dan
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Posted: November 9, 2003 11:10 AM PST; Last modified: November 9, 2003 11:10 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.7222223 Overall Rank: 1889 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Start saving so yew ken by a knew bord
KUDOS!!! :)
Please do, but not in front of me. I'm not wearing shoes.
haha i like it.... and i mean the spelling mistakes, too!
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Could be sheared of redundancies like 'I have to wait'.
Other than that a good effort