regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/6:34 PM
Jim Steinman is the genius behind Meat Loaf he wrote all the songs on 'Bat Out Of Hell' and 'Dead Ringer' and also another album which he recorded himself called 'Bad For Good'. If you check out the song 'You Took The Words Right Out Of My Mouth' on BOOH you will find a prelogue that talks about offering your throat to the wolf of the red roses etc.
Re: Daughter by pkdrunner	27-Aug-02/6:43 PM
I liked it as well and will give it 6 plus the 2 that Dark Angel held back 8/20
Re: Daughter by pkdrunner	27-Aug-02/6:44 PM
I liked it as well and will give it 6 plus the 2 that Dark Angel held back 8/20
Re: Comparisons by anagram	27-Aug-02/6:48 PM
Yeah this was not really a good one to post as it was based on a specific event in my life and the parts that are obvious to me are probably not to others. It was an attempt at irony as the 'angel' concerned worked in an office called 'comparisons'. But don't hold back be brutal if you must I don't look for tit for tat praise.
Re: Falling in Love by disturbedone182	27-Aug-02/7:03 PM
Not bad. Why 182? This number for some reason keeps coming up.Are you referring to Blink 182 or maybe Kurt 182 or something else.Please satisfy my curiousity.
Re: Falling in Love by disturbedone182	27-Aug-02/7:08 PM
Yeah 'fraid so.I take it you are talking about the film which I have never seen, somebody just mentioned it recently.Either that or I have become victim to what I think is my second failure to understand an Americanism this evening.
Re: Suicide III by disturbedone182	27-Aug-02/7:16 PM
OK enough is enough.I couldn't take 'Suicide II' or any future Suicides. You should listen to 'Don't Try Suicide' by Queen,track 2 side 2 'The Game' album and see if the great man can steer you in the right direction.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/7:21 PM
Isn't it fair to say that other teenagers might read this and see themselves and be grateful for not being alone.As I understand it there is no restriction on the age of the writers and readers on this site and would contend that there is room for all.
Re: father Worked Nights by poetandknowit	27-Aug-02/7:37 PM
Hate to state the obvious but given the title of the piece it was it would seem written by somebody's child.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	27-Aug-02/8:36 PM
Sorry GW gotta go it's 4:30am here , need my beauty sleep will speak to you and explain tomorrow.Night night anagram.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/4:30 PM
I am so glad someone else had the balls to ask.I believe I took a bit of a slating last night because of my ignorance of the subject.However I wasn't far off the mark with what I thought it was about.American insularism - we aliens from around the world don't know everything about your country purely because we know stuff about other ones as well.I could wax on for pages about Scottish or indeed British or even European issues without those from the land of the free following a word.So don't give us a hard time for not being aware of some US issues.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/4:40 PM
My dearest new found friend,I said I was slated,which I thought the comment of Mafioso alter ego No.1 was,and considered it to be because of my declared ignorance of the subject.However while I am grateful for and appreciate your concern, I didn't consider that I got a hard time.I drive taxis in the capital of Scotland on a Saturday night and trust me I would never have a hard time with a barbed comment from someone thousands of miles away in another world delivered through cyberspace.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/4:51 PM
This is an excellent point about poetry being read or listened to.I am sure that the vast majority of work both good and bad on this site and even in poetry books would improve greatly if you could hear it recited by the author as they would be able to read it while allowing for the feeling,the cadence and the spirit in which it was written.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/5:00 PM
No negative implication taken. You were right I did say 'hard time' but all with tongue lodged firmly in cheek.I said I would explain my poor offering 'Comparisons'.It was a long time ago and a relationship had ended,one that obviously meant more to me than the other,I lay awake one night troubling myself with thoughts of how to regain fair maidens affections and then it crossed my mind that I was being stupid and she would be sound asleep without giving me a thought.The lady concerned worked for a lawyer in an office they called 'comparisons' where they compared new cases to historic ones and I had met her there many times to plead for reconcilliation and it just seemed like the only title for as P&K would say my 'teenage angst' meanderings.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	28-Aug-02/5:47 PM
Sorry don't do the re-write thing.Once it's down dated and signed that's it for me.Know this isn't whats going to provide the best work ever but I am with those who say that if you think to hard about it the idea wasn't any good in the first place.
Re: Fetch by Limness	28-Aug-02/5:53 PM
Excellent, I've had one as well. He's a basket case short of his bed He walks backwards while wagging his head.
Re: The Ballet Studio by Corey McHattan	28-Aug-02/6:06 PM
Excellent.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	29-Aug-02/5:45 PM
My dear GW trust me it is patently obvious that a lot of deep thought and effort go into your works. Just that I have never considered writing my main hobby, I just write it occasionally when something either gets me down or really makes me happy or if I'm asked to pen some suitable words for a friends/family occasion, I have also been known to offer something up for nephews to use in school exams and the like but football (not US) is my real passion, music and pub quizzes also.It may be that one day I will take my own poetry more seriously but not just yet.I actually joined this site looking for inspiration but so far that has only came from yourself and one or two others. For the most part I enjoy reading the comments more than the poems(yours excluded).All that 'we're the greatest' and 'You're not worthy' crap splits my sides, especially when it is the so called adults talking to 14 year olds, touches left right and centre but is their ever a victory when the opposition are children.However I will keep in mind all that you say and would appreciate your thoughts on some of the others I have posted and not just the one that I consider the weakest.(Not that the others are literary masterpieces).
Re: Comparisons by anagram	29-Aug-02/6:07 PM
Sorry P&K just back from one which we lost (something of a rarity)could have done with your help.Long drive home though.However suitably full of the frothy stuff so a good time was had nonetheless.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	29-Aug-02/6:15 PM
Incidently just read your cancer Haikus after pub quiz comments,not relevant really but I do these quizzes with my mate who has brain cancer at 39 and a couple of months to live.Just found it a bit eerie that I should come across this poem after remarking about the pub quiz.