Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	8-Jan-03/7:19 AM
um...interesting viewpoint (i very much agree with not going to war in irag). one thing...is this really a haiku? i thought the form was 575. maybe i'm reading something wrong.
Re: one word by Blade	5-Dec-02/7:27 AM
wow...you're talented!L
Re: Slow death by Blade	1-Dec-02/3:47 PM
very funny...excedingly lovely...
Re: I Dig a Ponytail by Doris & Oats by w~* ATHENA *~w	20-Sep-02/5:54 AM
this is really good. i'm kinda confused, but that's ok, the poem has that feeling through out and it works. good job!t
Re: Love by DrHardDryve	22-Jul-02/9:11 AM
very very very nice!!
Re: cake by roses are read	21-Jul-02/7:54 PM
thanks!
Re: Digital Remembery by ifni	6-Apr-02/8:38 PM
hhmmm...i like this a lot a lot! you have a very interesting concept going on. could i suggest a change in line breaks though? maybe try this: capturing the transient in spinning light, the ones and zeroes of quantum meaning, capturing the fleeting flute of her voice on my spinning plastic disc.
Re: Death Alive by crims0ngh0st	6-Apr-02/8:35 PM
ok, you have a beautiful way with words and images, but in the first 24 or so lines, that's all it is. you have no substance, only spun sugar. there is no motive behind the words, it seems to be building and building up to something. i would suggest cutting the first 20 or so lines, and starting the poem with "The tender scorn of the norm;". then it all flows a bit better. keep writing!
Re: My Son by Kashi	6-Apr-02/8:31 PM
this is very beautiful imagery! i can totally feel your love for your son, but what will that love lead to? will it help him to grow? i got the impression that he was guiding you, and you needed him to tell you where to go, not the mother holding and helping her child. i sensed an equalness that is not fitting for what you are saying, not that your son is more or less smart than you, but you do think on different levels. he wants to play, you want to experiance. just some thoughts, listen, or don't.