| Re: Pissing Rant by brazen |
24-Aug-02/7:34 PM |
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| Re: Three Daughters by <~> |
24-Aug-02/7:41 PM |
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i don't remember if i even stopped to breath while i read this...it flows like broken water, so this should be your child.
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| Re: Buried at Sea by brazen |
26-Aug-02/5:32 AM |
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yes, and thank you...i must remember to stop writing while trying to download porn. its too hard to focus.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Aug-02/5:38 AM |
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may i please request that all further incubus songs be taken from S.C.I.E.N.C.E or before...thank you.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Aug-02/5:47 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Aug-02/5:49 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Aug-02/12:53 PM |
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my head has been known to be a realm of false realities and often a bit scattered, so when i come across something that i will not remember the words to, only the photos i've made for it, i must say it was an honor viewing your mental movie.
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| Re: Cancer Haikus by poetandknowit |
29-Aug-02/4:05 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
29-Aug-02/4:29 PM |
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nice incubus song...again i say. choose better.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
29-Aug-02/4:31 PM |
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what happened to "orbits of wonder/stellar" and "phase/just a phase"?...they were great live.
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29-Aug-02/6:02 PM |
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i've seen some graceful turds float too...on warm summer days, the flow of a creek makes for great toilet paper in the woods...its like a baday...or however its spelled.
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| Re: All Around Me by brazen |
30-Aug-02/10:11 AM |
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a momentary lack of creativity plus my overwhelming sense of boredom makes for a dangerous and deadly bout of verbal moonshine.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
30-Aug-02/10:16 AM |
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all I have to say is this, and that is any type of skank pie (personally, I prefer strawberry), the worst part of the pie is the crust...
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| Re: Black Heart by brazen |
1-Sep-02/5:09 PM |
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i know its lacking, but i don't believe in changing or editing what i write after i've written them...and this was the first poem i ever wrote a little of 5 years ago...i think its good for a first timer
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
2-Sep-02/7:02 AM |
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damn i'm good...and why does this sound like a Andrew WK song...you know, a piece of stupid repetitive shit?...oh well, we'll just have to trust ya now, huh?
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| Re: Black Heart by brazen |
2-Sep-02/8:13 AM |
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| Re: the art of dreaming (screaming) by brazen |
2-Sep-02/9:35 PM |
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alright, alright...even i, a stubborn man raised and true, will listen and subdue...i just need more patience and guidance...and do you want me to replace EVERY 'the' with 'no' and switch 'birth' with 'death'...i'll call up p. diddy and get with the remix
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| Re: Black Heart by brazen |
3-Sep-02/10:14 AM |
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let me explain myself better, after i apologize for apparently coming off egotistical, but i do not find myself up on a higher plain than anyone else...lets compare...if i was a painter and i messed up a stroke, i wouldn't start a new painting from scratch, i'd just go with it and see what comes out...thats the way i write. when i put too much thought into things they get messed up, so i write and just let whatever comes out...as i've stated, this was the FIRST poem i ever tried to right, and i'm actually not too fond of it, but i really don't like to go back and fix it because of the emotion it portrays to me, as if i was pretending to be happy when i was sad...i have no idea if any of this made sense, but this is the long, more detailed explanation of my thoughts. now, we continue our tour...
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| Re: Black Heart by brazen |
3-Sep-02/9:54 PM |
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ok ok, point taken...the painting was a terrible analogy...the only point i was trying to make is the I AM A TERRIBLE EDITOR...when i write it either comes out the way i want it the first time or it stays the way it is...i have been working on it...most of my other postings are slight alterations of previous poems, i think in one i combined two poems i wrote about the same moment...and to horus, i was taking your previous editing suggestions seriously, just, even in writing, my sarcastic overtones seem overly present, even when i'm not being so.
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| Re: the art of dreaming (screaming) by brazen |
3-Sep-02/10:18 PM |
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i hope this is more along the lines of what you were speaking of...i made a couple of my own changes to help...i think
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