Re: a comment on ...So We Stayed In The Water by Fear of Garbage	8-Feb-05/5:34 PM
nah, the best part is "no sense in waiting for the angel or the rain" she has two, three lines like that in every fucking poem. Some two unexpectedly combined words that just stun me, bursting in the brain with fractals of association and meaning.
Re: a comment on Ann & Dan & I by Goad	8-Feb-05/5:17 PM
And have you read this one recently? http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=61757 Am I just deluded, or is F.o.G. a serious genius?
Re: a comment on Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage	8-Feb-05/5:14 PM
SupremeDreamer, read this poem again. Do you still think it's an eight? Really? This is one of my favourite poems. Not like "one of my favourite poems from pomeranker", but like one of my Favourite Poems. It's sitting there in my mind, for the last year since I read it, with poems from Bukowski, Cummings, Rilke, etc. Bukowski would have liked this poem.
Re: Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage	8-Feb-05/5:00 PM
Christ, this is a good fucking poem. I read it a year ago, and it was still in my head...so I came looking for it. And it's still gold.
Re: a comment on Separation by Dovina	8-Feb-05/4:42 PM
if you come from an evangelical or fundamentalist background, the whole thing rings quite true. That hot-cold thing is an oft-quoted passage. And the whole bunch of them, they're just a pack of pharisees accusing everyone else of being sinners, absurd since Christ hung out with sinners and shat on the pharisees. Hey Dovina -- I grew up in the UPC. Yep, me. One grandfather, six uncles, a brother, and a brother-in-law were/are preachers. Church 3 times a week 'till I was 18. Memorized ENTIRE Romans & most of Acts when I was 15/16, went all the way to the finals on a bible quiz team. Would you have guessed it? lol
Re: a comment on Family Portrait by woodstock20000	8-Feb-05/4:17 PM
I'm sorry; don't mean to harass But I fear, to be truthful, alas This pome's for the birds And to scratch the last words Heck - you might as well just scratch your ass.
Re: Reverse Pschology by Mister Cakes	8-Feb-05/4:04 PM
Here's a pome that's naught more than an anagram Of a word with a y that's gone on the lam I assume you've some meaning In there for the gleaning But if none can construe it, who gives a damne?
Re: The Disease Of The Dancing Cats by Mister Cakes	8-Feb-05/3:50 PM
There's apparently cats who will dance When at dark they at last have the chance Blah blah blah yadda yadda For us to care, dude, you've gotta The conceit with some PO'TRY enhance.
Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes	8-Feb-05/3:39 PM
He spent 22 years in a sock? Champs-Elysées with some French dude named Jacques? Unless "sock" is a metaphor, For the crucial part of a whore -- In which case Mister Cakes is a cock.
Re: a comment on Ann & Dan & I by Goad	8-Feb-05/3:19 PM
Mr. Cakes didn't get what he thought, (and it seems doesn't like what I've wrought) Since he voted a three Which insult left me Disconcerted, distressed and distraught. Not.
Re: a comment on Ann & Dan & I by Goad	8-Feb-05/3:09 PM
no I hadn't! Thanks, that was great. I see that you saw this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=113919 It made me cry.
Re: just can't by shygirl1619	6-Feb-05/5:10 PM
A shy girl who was recently dumped On PR with her poetry jumped. We'll do nothing but damn her For spelling and grammar And rhyme have -- like love -- got her stumped.
Re: a comment on Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	6-Feb-05/8:33 AM
I've an eight for my perfidy, how grand Though the rest of the poetry's judged bland perhaps it'd less bore you the Schnectadian to explore you -- can you more than the chickadee withstand?
Re: a comment on Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	6-Feb-05/8:11 AM
What a poet will do to stick to a form! With words play what tricks to the mold to conform! But it jusn't isn't fair - no! To harm a poor little helpless baby sparrow, One man's tale as a pome to perform.
Re: You took my half dozen by poodietat	6-Feb-05/4:53 AM
far more interesting than the posts it is in reaction to. Great fun as an in-joke on societate de wanker. But it also stands alone, with that Bukowskian last line.
Re: a comment on Enrapture by fevriere	3-Feb-05/4:13 PM
well, it has many allusions for me. Were you aware of the double meaning of your own pome? because an arabesque in ballet often accompanies a long beat, and the transition to/from another form involves arching/flattening the arch of the foot, accompanied by a grace note. So every main word in the pome has a double meaning -- two parallel images, complementing each other. Sent chills down my spine. Painful points -- also fits both the dance metaphor and the meaning of arabesque arch as an arch decorated with an angular motif of stylized leaves & vines.
Re: A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	3-Feb-05/2:28 PM
I liked the apples line very much. It's like one of those delightful, bursting with child-like joy unexepected lines eec was so good at surprising you with.
Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	3-Feb-05/2:22 PM
Loved it. Beautiful and wistful. God I'm a sucker for wistful. I think you're channeling "Anonymous" again in this piece, lol, it's got that timeless feel (You know, Anonymous the "small rain" guy) kill "slip sibilant." It's clever & reflexive -- which is completely out of place in the mood of the piece. Perhaps I agree the last fractious line oughtn't be so altered. I'm not sure. Suppose you could say something like "with the feeling your home, girl,...". But you've certainly earned the right to mess with forms however you like...
Re: Enrapture by fevriere	3-Feb-05/1:37 PM
Very clever, and quite sweet. A grace note indeed.
Re: a comment on Enrapture by fevriere	3-Feb-05/1:34 PM
lol. perhaps if you looked up the words in a dictionary?