Re: route nine by Bill Z Bub	9-Dec-02/10:54 PM
Beautiful.
Re: a comment on route nine by Bill Z Bub	9-Dec-02/10:52 PM
I am a classic Freudian it's true, but I also talk about many other things. My arguement is that either you are afraid to treat me as anything other than a sexual object or you simply don't know how. I have never 'cried foul' as you put it. I am frustrated by the way you ignore me as a serious writer. You supposedly never have the time to comment on my poetry in any constructive manner, but yet you have oodles of time to waste humiliating me. I have never called you a lonely old bastard. In your words I was just a sweet spot during a weak moment brought about by drink and an outcast feeling. It is too dangerous to look at me and see the woman I really am. It is you who are struggling to keep me one-dimensional. Now you are really reaching. I have never been, am not currently, and will never be a bore. You're just in deeper than you care to be.
Re: a comment on Dear Mr. Poetry, could you hold my purse? <how does babbit do it> by horus8	9-Dec-02/10:00 PM
He's much more Billy Holiday than Henry Rollins. Your discription couldn't be further off.
Re: Jacaranda by David	9-Dec-02/4:12 PM
Try 'enchanted by your....' that way you really have been transformed. This isn't about a tree is it?
Re: triple suicide server line by Bill Z Bub	9-Dec-02/12:25 PM
Suicide Typo, is an affective play, you are a very good writer.
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	9-Dec-02/12:17 PM
What did you change? It sounds cleaner each time, but the last edit must of been very mininimal.
Re: Missing the In-Between by <~>	9-Dec-02/12:12 PM
Carries the image of sad contentment with dignity, I don't find dogs in poems very often, loyal creatures.
Re: a comment on route nine by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/6:38 PM
A friend in need is a friend indeed, but I'm not the any-port-in-a-storm kind. Thanks for the offer, but I don't like the idea of an Angel no matter how Daek, picking the flesh off my dead dream. I'll just put her on the compost heap along with all the others; keep her little shoes in a box for a keepsake. See, you've already helped. Can I have a rain-check, just in case? For I reckon that the sufferings of this present time are not worthy to be compared with the glory which shall be revealed in us. Romans 8:18.
Re: a comment on route nine by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/12:59 PM
When will I learn...
Re: a comment on route nine by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/12:36 PM
I prefer tea if you don't mind, and littles cakes if it's no trouble. Promise me you're not just using me because your drunk or lonely. Even a glamourous bitch can be hurt and in need. I heard you get your honey from killer bees.
Re: a comment on missing time by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/12:11 PM
Nice edit. Those wonderful children need to be cut loose sometimes, they'll be back.
Re: And uncle sam says... by INTRANSIT	7-Dec-02/10:47 AM
Changethetitle,itdoesn'ttiein.Didyoumakeupthethirdline?
Re: a comment on route nine by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/10:30 AM
Out of touch with what? Your flippant uncaring manner? Your superiority? Your right to be cruel? Why can't you just leave me alone?
Re: a comment on route nine by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/10:16 AM
Fuck you, leave me the fuck alone you stupid fuck. You never address me in any kind of constructive or even, dare I say it, mature manner. Your just a miserable lout, and I've lost all patience with you. What in the fuck do you care what i comment on his poems? Of course you will counter that you don't care, that you were just calling attention to my silly girlish remark, or that you were just teasing me. You make me feel so tredmendously sad, you have no idea. I'm not sure who's fooling who as I'm watching your decay We both no you could deflate A 7 hurricane Seems like you and your tribe decided you'd re-write the law Segragate the Body from the Soul Don't give me yours but i'll still give you mine I can look your God right in the eye. I believe in defending what we could've stood for. It seems in vogue to be a closet mysogynist. A change of course in our direction A dash of truth spread thinly like a flag. Oh Zion please remove your glove dispel every trace of his spoken word that has lodged in my vortex --oh but no Messiahs need people dying in their name you could have spared me.
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	7-Dec-02/9:54 AM
They are nuts. What about fossil fuel? Pineapples? Sugar cane? The clothes on their neurotic backs? Name one thing in this life that is not the product of oppression.
Re: untitled by dniknam	7-Dec-02/1:30 AM
You know what, you could be brilliant. Get past the pain and pay attention to what you're saying. Stop repeating yourself. Get rid of the typos, first step. Then take a deep breath and make sure you don't lose the only thing that keeps you going. Stay focused. 10, because of your emotion.
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	6-Dec-02/11:51 PM
There is so much going on here, you really need to hold back, I know it's hard at your age. Trust me. tender lids Darkened in sleep. You seem new. Do not venture beyond that. It says everything. Get rid of 'over' in stanza 2(otherwise perfect) Also 'soon to bleed' in stanza one, you don't need it. Your emotion comes shining through. Trust the audience. 'Pouty' is also an un-needed adjective, 'perfect' says it all. Complete 'morn' to morning. I wish I wis I could know you.
Re: route nine by Bill Z Bub	6-Dec-02/11:39 PM
Oh my God yes. Bring the last to lines back up. They belong there, common, that's the point after all. Make them common and humble, like you.
Re: Allegheny Winter Lament by jdsnyd	6-Dec-02/11:33 AM
Very fine. I have no winter here. Winter only means paper whites instead of black-eyed susans.
Re: a comment on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit	6-Dec-02/9:10 AM
I have nothing to hide.