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3-Sep-02/7:54 AM |
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You immobilize someone, preferably in a head-lock, then rub the top of their head with your knuckles causing friction causing heat causing pain. Used on younger siblings and naughty children. Sometimes a combination of pain & affection. You're being hurt but you're also in close quarters.
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3-Sep-02/8:01 AM |
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No it's suppose to be a period, but I'm to selfish to lose my votes. You're favorite? Maybe it's your mood today. Going out later?
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3-Sep-02/8:05 AM |
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Thank you dear, I shall fix it right now. Please re-vote. See how the adjectives you use apply to people as well? That's what this poem is about.
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3-Sep-02/8:11 AM |
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Well, you can always masturbate. You can us this scenario as your fantasy.
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| Re: in the eye of the stone dragon: by Sapphire |
3-Sep-02/8:16 AM |
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Well this is erotic but the salted tongue thing is too comical.
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3-Sep-02/8:21 AM |
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Yeah well,it happens to alot more people then anyone realizes. You'd be suprised. It's ok though, life is not for the weak. I had my share of tradgedies, but so have you I'm sure. I'm very happy with the reception this poem has received. It's one of the most honest poems I've written. Hardly any editing it just came out after all those years.
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3-Sep-02/8:25 AM |
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Great idea! If you'd like we can strike a bargain. I'll write and you can be the porn-broker! We'll share the profits 50/50.
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| Re: Oh So! by KezzY20 |
3-Sep-02/8:28 AM |
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| Re: Bring me back to life by kawakurdi |
3-Sep-02/8:30 AM |
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"renew my address" is a good line. The rest is too cliche.
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3-Sep-02/8:31 AM |
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3-Sep-02/8:36 AM |
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Some very lovely lines especially when spoken 'quick shot of heat' 'gold in your throat' 'hummed in your blood' excellent.
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3-Sep-02/8:38 AM |
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I'd like to make a fortune, but in these porn infested waters can erotica still thrive?
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| Re: the mattress is a magnet by silvertongueddevil |
3-Sep-02/8:42 AM |
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Fantastic poetry. Your observations are always true and original. The title of this caught my eye.
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3-Sep-02/8:46 AM |
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I'm going to assume this is about an elderly couple who has been together since youth. I like it's simplicity.
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| Re: Casus Belli by unknown |
3-Sep-02/8:52 AM |
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Your taking a chance by standing on un-popular ground that's good. The poem needs weeding.
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3-Sep-02/8:54 AM |
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Erotica abounds. What are the Gods trying to tell me so early this morning? The title doesn't make sense with the poem.
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3-Sep-02/9:05 AM |
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'How definite you seem' captures the cherishing and the disbelief in watching someone beautiful. Cup, one of my favorite words, cup cup cup. the 'Khu' sound followed by the lips coming together. I had trouble with eyeball til I realized it was a metaphor for the earth. You are a tender romantic.
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| Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof |
3-Sep-02/9:17 AM |
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I really do love your poetry. I carry your images around with me. The stablehand and now these men. The transposing of the stereotypes is wonderful, and myth is eveything. Will they say that, or is she insecure? Concise.
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| Re: Shelter by poetandknowit |
3-Sep-02/9:32 AM |
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My skin blended from the hunter? this means camoflauge i'm sure, but 'from' makes it awkward. Otherwise perfect, as always.
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| Re: Thinkin! by KezzY20 |
3-Sep-02/9:36 AM |
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Oh my goodness. Mother goose is more poetry then this. 90% of this poem is either a preposition or a pronoun. Try adjectives, adverbs, nouns.
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