| Re: a comment on A Circle Starts with C by rusty |
7-Aug-03/3:02 PM |
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glad you think it's ok, but the point is that it leads nowhere. The action is useless, there are no true emotions.
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| Re: a comment on The Smell of Wolves by rusty |
7-Aug-03/2:40 PM |
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prawnes yes, cause I'm sure it wasn't poets
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| Re: a comment on A Circle Starts with C by rusty |
6-Aug-03/2:12 PM |
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two questions, first in line four is it the use of "cleave" that is confusing? and I agree with your comment about "they both giggle" but as I sit her and look at the poem I realize that I'm trying to get to the action of throwing the phone at the mattress. The anger for that action comes from the remark or sound from the two. Do you have any thoughts on how else I could get to that action? because of course I need to bring in the phone so the call can be made.
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| Re: a comment on A Circle Starts with C by rusty |
6-Aug-03/7:44 AM |
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thank you very much. I think people aren't seeing what I'm trying to do. I feel that to talk about something you must first understand it. How can you talk of rape (not that any of these poems do) in a peaceful way. Life is more then a shell. I just hope that my humble words can express emotions larger then myself.
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| Re: Killing Ben Afleck by Shardik |
5-Aug-03/2:33 PM |
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| Re: Karma by http://mulberryfairy |
5-Aug-03/2:25 PM |
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I love "frenzied victim" I had to read this poem a few time out loud because tounge hit teeth so nicely.
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| Re: Ode to a Fox Cub by http://mulberryfairy |
5-Aug-03/2:19 PM |
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what I enjoyed most was the vision of humanity and nature the questions and statements that were given. I very beautiful peice
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| Re: Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek |
2-Aug-03/10:52 PM |
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very powerful: the images the emotions. When reading poetry it is always hard to not think of the writer as protagonist. I must say I enjoyed this especially the end there is a childlike essence that is so desperate in us all.
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| Re: Anouk by daniella |
2-Aug-03/10:46 PM |
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I enjoy the connection and compassion in this poem the use of the flower and the horizon. It's always nice to see affection in a real sense.
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| Re: Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~> |
2-Aug-03/10:40 PM |
I wanted to change my comment given the state I was in last time.
I like the use of romance and then the line "I take whatever comes to me" it's a wonderful vision that everything is prey and a meal. I would almost like to see more of that through out the poem. My question is what formula, there physical strength or the ability to make a thread? I must say the last line draws me in very much and I left feeling whole.
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| Re: Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~> |
31-Jul-03/11:29 AM |
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Since I now what your writing of I feel I have an unfair advantage. There needs to be more length (not in reference to the poem but to protagonist) The use of force, the speed of the kill. The power and presure of this wonderful creator. I really enjoy the ice cream shop and the piles of husks, though I'm a little confused by "the inchor inside me..." I'll have to show you my pictures.
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