Re: The Lover and The Rapist by Skamper	18-Jun-07/7:02 PM
"make all your birthday wishes – true" why didn't you inlude COME? Speak it out loud, tell me what beat is missing? Check This: make all your birthday wishes cum true while I push my fingers deeper into you --- Do you get what I'm saying? That aside, here's a nine.
Re: a comment on grim task by lmp	4-May-07/11:19 AM
Well Edna is in a category of pompousness all of her own; she simply happens to be British. British opinions being pompous simply made my bile all the more venomous. :)
Re: a comment on grim task by lmp	1-May-07/1:35 PM
I was speaking to Edna.
Re: a comment on grim task by lmp	29-Apr-07/2:12 PM
Take your pompous British opinions and shove them up your wrinkled cunt. Do you not find it amusing that the United Kingdom is simply another American pawn in the workings of this world? I do. So fuck your superior clingings to "English Proper", twat. British clinging to rigidity stifles any evolution in language. Go roll in dusty volumes of the Lord Faggatus.
Re: ONLY POETRY IS FOREVER by daggatolar	24-Apr-07/4:26 PM
Poetry is certainly NOT forever. It is temporary, like the words and images imployed in its form. Meanings distort and crumble with time, fading like a cracked picture, till most no longer even remember... Then it Dies, and another poet makes a new structure. No vote.
Re: The Death of Us by andrewjthomas	24-Apr-07/3:47 PM
I think the last stanza was an exellent cherry to this cake. Nine.
Re: a comment on Rap? Hip-hop? What has this thing become? by DreamerSupreme	24-Apr-07/3:41 PM
Thank you.
Re: Ation by bwaha	23-Apr-07/8:06 PM
stairs- stares. Unless there's some sort of pun intended. That aside, I think you shouldn't have tried to make this a lyric. But, there is a lot of interesting segments in this that kindles my interest, like stanza one, three, and the refrain(s). It also reminds of how I used "ation" in most of my last post.. though I hadn't contrived it.. nevermind that, I'm woolgathering. Anyway, I give it a six over-all.
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	23-Apr-07/7:46 PM
But who remembers Stalin? Not the average laman. But they do remember Hitler. That and none of this has anything to do with your poem, which, with its context, the Holocaust does eclipse it.
Re: a comment on Unsung American Dream by SupremeDreamer	23-Apr-07/7:42 PM
-Bows- :]
Re: a comment on Unsung American Dream by SupremeDreamer	23-Apr-07/7:42 PM
Well, in retrospect, I'd like to redo the title.. then again, I'm not much good with titles. Thank you for your vote.
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:55 PM
But the holocaust eclipses everything. Even when you try to express yourself on this topic. So, why did you entwine the approach? That's why I say you need a better approach. And I'm done for today. Peace.
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:52 PM
Well... slaves to tradition slaves to the cult of the chosen. slaves since they had been slaves .. like how many times? Egyptians, Babylonians.. Romans.. In the essence, they are descendants of slaves.. long ago they served under whips. Now nobody get bloody fucking defensive. I didn't form their history. That aside, now they came after the holocaust, made use of global guilt, and fucking invaded a land that had been established shortly after the jews were driven out of Israel, and the massive spread of Islam. In fact, this is what? A few thousand years of established residence? Not only that, Israel makes claim to legitimacy based on a wholly religious BELIEF. The belief that for whatever reason god gave his bloody chosen some shit-hole desert area, and since that is so their claim is fucking sacred and holy... oh, wait, how would a Muslim interpret that whole premise of invasion? He would have more than enough reason to keep up his brutal Jihad. It's down to a basic analogy: Say the indians decide to reclaim the United States? Do they have legitimacy? I'd say so.. weren't they here first?... But anyway.. I'm done ranting. Peace.
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:18 PM
Well, here in the yank pot, sasha is a girl name. Not common for me to run into male sasha's here at home. But it's really minor, my comments still apply, gender assumptions reversed, of course.
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:16 PM
Where and when did I mention anything such as the broad topic of the merits/demerits of poetry? I didn't. I simply said that is how I approach such poems, and I have my reasons, they are mine, but in no way did I say it applies in that broader sense, or claim it to be absolute. Oh. Relax?
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:13 PM
I did. Again, the conflicting images over-run the other pieces. Do you not get what I'm saying? For gods sake? It's simply that which I'm trying to say with my criticism. I read the entire thing, again, that is not the problem. If I don't read it, I don't bother commenting on it. And If I really didn't like the -attempted- message, I would have already proffered up my ranker zero. Do yourself a favor: Relax.
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:05 PM
I had not said it to be innappropiate for you to write whatever mush you wish to spew. I simply stated that I, in no way, take it seriously or with sincerity, unless you were similarly or actually persecuted in such a manner. And about Poland? No it isn't Germany.. but for a time missy? It was part of Germany. That's why the British got into the mix in the first place. "Breeding room." Capiche?
Re: a comment on Ein Kampf by Sasha	22-Apr-07/6:01 PM
And Mama said to Papa “He is no longer mine” And the blood poured out on the snowbank Like cold communion wine And the black boots beat like centuries On the days of my Jewish face And a soldier went for a tree branch And broke it like my race Oh, oh! And that stupid Hitler quote. I'm sorry, was there some deeper meaning hidden underneath the fucking flora of references to WW2 and Jewish ghettos and tyrants, slaves... I'm sorry woman, like I said before: Trim away the fuckin extra hubris, and the entire approach you took, because as it should be obvious-- YOUR INTENTIONS HAVE FAILED, because they have no room in the colors presented in this poem. That is all, Madam.
Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010	22-Apr-07/5:43 PM
Ahh... now I know love is all great, transcending every thing around it, despite it's tendency to rouse so many fucking cliches... But this poem isn't. This could be anyone. I see nothing. You gave me a clouded reflection of the idealized sensations. Ultimately? I feel horridly cheated. Zero.
Re: Pink BAlls by EAger to Offend	22-Apr-07/5:40 PM
Amusing. ;]