Re: a comment on Tate Street 1956 by wunboi	21-Sep-02/11:26 PM
Yes that last stanza shows signs of laziness . Ill have to rework it . The elipsis? I guess you mean the line of stops. Point taken but Ill leave it anyway
Re: Gone Away by Christof	21-Sep-02/11:19 PM
Very good . Tha last stanza is a corker!
Re: Glassblowers by Christof	21-Sep-02/11:04 PM
Neat,precise but marred by the first line .I love the irony of the second stanza.
Re: Work by poetandknowit	20-Sep-02/4:26 AM
Mate .....Its not a poem,but a piece of prose .You have arranged lines & sreamed thoughts to fit a form. Ideas images are not encouraged. It has plenty of potential but no challenge.
Re: Sleep Well by jriemerm	23-Jul-02/4:48 AM
It is very evocative of the sleep of poetic torment ,Well done
Re: la petite mort by poetekzen	23-Jul-02/4:40 AM
Great economy .........and i learnt a new word ..........keep going
Re: Her Light by wunboi	23-Jul-02/4:17 AM
whorus many thanks for your replies . I value the comments of someoen who wrties in english as a second languge wunboi
Re: Smiling by Jill Stockinger	18-Jul-02/4:24 AM
A great foundation but see cyberians comment. It does lose control especially from stanza three, where the rhythm abrutly change & verbosity takes charge . Otherwise I wish I could do it