poemranker ::20 most recent comments by wunboi and replies

Comments bywunboi, the 20 most recent, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Tate Street 1956 by wunboi 21 Sep 2002, 11:26 PM
Yes that last stanza shows signs of laziness . Ill have to rework it . The elipsis? I guess you mean the line of stops. Point taken but Ill leave it anyway
on Gone Away by Christof 21 Sep 2002, 11:19 PM
Very good . Tha last stanza is a corker!
on Glassblowers by Christof 21 Sep 2002, 11:04 PM
Neat,precise but marred by the first line .I love the irony of the second stanza.
on Work by poetandknowit 20 Sep 2002, 4:26 AM
Mate .....Its not a poem,but a piece of prose .You have arranged lines & sreamed thoughts to fit a form. Ideas images are not encouraged. It has plenty of potential but no challenge.
on Sleep Well by jriemerm 23 Jul 2002, 4:48 AM
It is very evocative of the sleep of poetic torment ,Well done
on la petite mort by poetekzen 23 Jul 2002, 4:40 AM
Great economy .........and i learnt a new word ..........keep going
on Her Light by wunboi 23 Jul 2002, 4:17 AM
whorus
many thanks for your replies . I value the comments of someoen who wrties in english as a second languge
wunboi
on Smiling by Jill Stockinger 18 Jul 2002, 4:24 AM
A great foundation but see cyberians comment. It does lose control especially from stanza three, where the rhythm abrutly change & verbosity takes charge . Otherwise I wish I could do it