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la petite mort (Free verse) by poetekzen
hands discovering planes and valleys hoping they've never been touched with such audacity such intimacy but is anything a frontier anymore? maybe where lust and love intersect maybe at its vertex where teeth express hope on the napes of necks, nails carve sonnets along the lengths of writhing backs, hips ascertain exactly how legs can be affectionately splayed, arms perfect the tightest embrace and hair cannot help but be entangled in fingers signing "I love you"

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8292685
Weighted score: 5.829231
Overall Rank: 1630
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PST
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[10]... anonymous @ | 20-Mar-02/5:54 PM | Reply
Ah, yeah... wow. Recommend submitting this to www.nfg.ca
[9] Adriaan @ 196.15.188.2 | 13-May-02/2:07 AM | Reply
This made me smile and think of Saturday night. I appreciate the images you use to express intimacy.
[10]... anonymous @ 62.254.32.4 | 19-May-02/1:04 AM | Reply
this is wonderful; i find no fault in it
and SO sexy!!!! (bien sur)
[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.108.147 | 11-Jul-02/6:18 AM | Reply
sexy.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.39.51.45 | 11-Jul-02/7:16 AM | Reply
sinful
[9] webguy @ 216.34.217.190 | 12-Jul-02/3:58 AM | Reply
SIGNING "I love you" makes it work...(signing as i see it makes it a pact, not just lust, but mutual consent to the sinful sex crime: an affair that both parties acknowledge to be wrong but ritually observe anyways...) Affairs as true love is debatable but most people believe that. You captured that here.
[7] deleted user @ 24.199.93.49 | 12-Jul-02/8:25 AM | Reply
Should be "La Petite Morte"; otheriwse nice rhythm and development, good use of adjectives and imagery
[8] deleted user @ 65.101.240.23 | 13-Jul-02/2:40 AM | Reply
lovely, sexy...although'planes' should be 'plains'
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 18-Jul-02/2:55 AM | Reply
I was hoping for me ins and outs me luv..
[2] dilips_10 @ 203.197.190.94 | 20-Jul-02/3:39 AM | Reply
its lust, not love... entire poem in a wrong way... i agree, its debatable... just my 2 paisas
[5] wunboi @ 203.26.75.221 | 23-Jul-02/4:40 AM | Reply
Great economy .........and i learnt a new word ..........keep going
[10] alexander @ 217.35.80.128 | 23-Aug-02/5:31 AM | Reply
Oui, c'est ca
[10] ben @ 213.122.131.10 | 24-Aug-02/9:37 AM | Reply
Nice-10/10
[4] ==Doylum @ 213.123.42.214 | 25-Aug-02/7:01 PM | Reply
Sorry but that doesn't bring climax to me, not even close, especially since its a filty foreign one it doesn't build up at all, its flacid. Was she faking?
[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Dec-02/2:24 PM | Reply
But can you staple and stamp with your arms in a pole soaked in semen with your chin. how many words a minute? next.
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