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Free verse № 154

la petite mort

by poetekzen

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 15 comments

hands discovering planes and valleys hoping they've never been touched with such audacity such intimacy but is anything a frontier anymore? maybe where lust and love intersect maybe at its vertex where teeth express hope on the napes of necks, nails carve sonnets along the lengths of writhing backs, hips ascertain exactly how legs can be affectionately splayed, arms perfect the tightest embrace and hair cannot help but be entangled in fingers signing "I love you"

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15 comments

[10] anonymous 20-Mar-02/5:54 PM Reply
Ah, yeah... wow. Recommend submitting this to www.nfg.ca
[9] Adriaan 13-May-02/2:07 AM Reply
This made me smile and think of Saturday night. I appreciate the images you use to express intimacy.
[10] anonymous 19-May-02/1:04 AM Reply
this is wonderful; i find no fault in it
and SO sexy!!!! (bien sur)
[n/a] razorgrin 11-Jul-02/6:18 AM Reply
sexy.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 11-Jul-02/7:16 AM Reply
sinful
[9] webguy 12-Jul-02/3:58 AM Reply
SIGNING "I love you" makes it work...(signing as i see it makes it a pact, not just lust, but mutual consent to the sinful sex crime: an affair that both parties acknowledge to be wrong but ritually observe anyways...) Affairs as true love is debatable but most people believe that. You captured that here.
[7] deleted user 12-Jul-02/8:25 AM Reply
Should be "La Petite Morte"; otheriwse nice rhythm and development, good use of adjectives and imagery
[8] deleted user 13-Jul-02/2:40 AM Reply
lovely, sexy...although'planes' should be 'plains'
[8] horus8 18-Jul-02/2:55 AM Reply
I was hoping for me ins and outs me luv..
[2] dilips_10 20-Jul-02/3:39 AM Reply
its lust, not love... entire poem in a wrong way... i agree, its debatable... just my 2 paisas
[5] wunboi 23-Jul-02/4:40 AM Reply
Great economy .........and i learnt a new word ..........keep going
[10] alexander 23-Aug-02/5:31 AM Reply
Oui, c'est ca
[10] ben 24-Aug-02/9:37 AM Reply
Nice-10/10
[4] ==Doylum 25-Aug-02/7:01 PM Reply
Sorry but that doesn't bring climax to me, not even close, especially since its a filty foreign one it doesn't build up at all, its flacid. Was she faking?
[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> 16-Dec-02/2:24 PM Reply
But can you staple and stamp with your arms in a pole soaked in semen with your chin. how many words a minute? next.