| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/2:50 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/2:49 AM |
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You talk alot for what little you say.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/2:48 AM |
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| Re: untitled by betty |
8-Mar-03/2:47 AM |
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I love it. Good use of ending words for each line. I like the words: rendered, enamoured, caputurings. Nice use of verbs. Overall, succinct, and highly personal at the same time.
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| Re: a comment on vent tent by Crakyamuni |
8-Mar-03/1:13 AM |
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Rhyme is a bitch pure and simple. Hardly taken seriously these days along with meter. People see it as a dead art form. But I do like that fact taht you're trying it and strongly encourage it. Screw with it. Don't be afraid to do stupid rhymes. Who knows. And cool brackets and stuff.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/1:09 AM |
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Hahaha thanks. I like your forwardness.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/1:08 AM |
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Coming from someone with your talent, I'm flattered. I thank you very much and thank you for the support you've given a fledgling.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/1:07 AM |
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Thanks... I didn't mean to be that sick, but maybe I did. Thanks tho.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
8-Mar-03/1:06 AM |
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Hahaha thanks for you support. *shrug* Maybe he is, may he isn't. Though he should be slightly more kind. It doesn't matter if this isn't reality... there are good ways of putting things and bad ways.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
5-Mar-03/2:07 AM |
????????? I'm really confused....
1) I'm Asian. Not a wigger.
2) Give what you receive. I was honest and straighforward with you and told you merely what I thought.
3) Please be mature and don't say anything about my mother.
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| Re: a comment on The Drunkest ever by horus8 |
5-Mar-03/2:01 AM |
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btw... yeah you're a poet but you don't need to be a snob about it.
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| Re: a comment on The Drunkest ever by horus8 |
5-Mar-03/2:00 AM |
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nix what i said about the descrip... it was great. anywho.;
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| Re: The Drunkest ever by horus8 |
5-Mar-03/1:58 AM |
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Ok... overall pretty good. Creative rhymes and some really good description. But... if you're gonna use meter, be consistent. If you read it, you expect some more meter. Then again, it could be part of your theme. *shrug* Some of the rhymes are good but too clustered. It's just too much to absorb. The continuity of rhyme and rhythm aren't there but work well where employed. And again, continuity with punctuation is kinda questionable.
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| Re: vent tent by Crakyamuni |
5-Mar-03/1:49 AM |
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Creative use of rhyme... but also maybe a problem? Rhyme can be troublesome when it comes to serious poetry. But I do like your rhymes... creative. You might want to look at the continuity of your explitives. They should be somewhat close in length, but your first one is longer than the others.
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| Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH |
5-Mar-03/1:43 AM |
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