on The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT
31 Dec 2002, 12:45 PM
actually now that I look at it again, it's the second stanza, not the first, which I like so much,... the first is good, too, though. I'm such a 'wuss'.
on The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT
31 Dec 2002, 12:43 PM
I really like the first stanza, very witty use of words. I'm probably not qualified to comment to much on the direction of the meaning or the choices you've made, but I enjoyed it, though somehow it seems to be missing something.
on The Eternal Center by Quarton
31 Dec 2002, 12:14 PM
The ending is a bit abrupt, I'm guilty of that kinda' thing myself. I like it, it's very thought inspiring, and very near profound, and it flows well. A nice use of words.
I like it the way it is, thanks. "in your face" is an allusion to the blatant deception and pretense when sycophantic gestures are thrust at us as a way to placate, because we are supposedly so stupid as not to notice, or to not care because we are awed by the gesture itself.
But Bachus, "...the 'wassup' brigade," is supposed to tune someone in to the ridiculous nature of those plastic, mindless
twits who assault people with their vapid personalities and
cliched lives. And this, by the way, was not a rave; it was a party I threw about 15yrs ago to celebrate three of my friends
birthdays. They were all turning forty within a few days of one another and so I celebrated with a 'wingding', that turned into a monstrous affair of eclectic personalities and genres.
twits who assault people with their vapid personalities and
cliched lives. And this, by the way, was not a rave; it was a party I threw about 15yrs ago to celebrate three of my friends
birthdays. They were all turning forty within a few days of one another and so I celebrated with a 'wingding', that turned into a monstrous affair of eclectic personalities and genres.
on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub
22 Dec 2002, 11:10 AM
Nice.
on missing time by Bill Z Bub
22 Dec 2002, 10:57 AM
Awesome!