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-s: awkward, confusing
+s: this works in a limerick...although it's hardly catchy. Try some sexual innuendo in the last line.

Diffused light coming from the north has a cool cast on it in the morning, as time passes the light climbs up the kelvin scale.

Oh, and this is good except it needs more detatched humour I think. Rather, that's the part I liked.

For some reason this poem seemed really...fast..not short so much but...it flowed fast....not well, not badly either, but it seemed really decisive, almost curt.

The rythm lacks the weight of the meaning- I suppose I would liken the sentiment in this poem to that of a raver saying the same words.

Be as specific in intent as you can. Either speed it up (by making it more repetetive or by making the meaning unrealistically timeless/universal) or slow it down, to let it span some time.

I think three's a good number to use (you use "forever" to start 3 lines), since we divide time into before now and after. Which is three things.

You are a pompous ass and I want to have your children and yet at the same time I want to cut your hands off and steal your keyboard.

Bra
vo.

Decent image content, but it is wasted in the self reference. Try removing all references to yourself and try replacing the concept of (your) him with something like that-special-someone-we-all-have-you-know-what-I'm-saying.

And see if ending the poem with the broken lines from the center does anything.

And furthermore you don't love me, you're just in love with my po-ems.