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So Shall I For You (Free verse) by onlyontuesdays
Just as the sun spreads its fiery wings to the sky
Just as the ocean gently kisses the shore
Just as the wind guides the dancing grass
Forever together, so shall I for you
Just as the stars dance across the infinite horizon
Just as the flooding river shapes the land
Just as the embers glow til the breaking dawn
Forever together, so shall I for you
Just as the moon, forever pulling the waves
Just as the earth, forever spinning through the stars
Just as the rain, forever waiting for the fall
Forever together, so shall I for you
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.642857
Weighted score: 5.4699664
Overall Rank: 2848
Posted: May 11, 2002 8:43 PM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 8:43 PM PDT
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Be as specific in intent as you can. Either speed it up (by making it more repetetive or by making the meaning unrealistically timeless/universal) or slow it down, to let it span some time.
I think three's a good number to use (you use "forever" to start 3 lines), since we divide time into before now and after. Which is three things.