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Stars In My Eyes (Free verse) by onlyontuesdays You've left me here.
I'm lying here all alone on the bed,
The spot beside me still warm,
As I roll over and over and over,
Just trying to catch some sleep
As it eludes my wandering mind.
I muffle my sobs with a pillow,
And try to blink the tears from my eyes.
Then I feel your hands,
Strong,
Warm,
And loving,
As they run across my shoulders.
I smile,
And blink the stars from my eyes
As the nightmare fades from memory,
Replaced by the beautiful reality
That is you.
You kiss me awake
And hold me,
Whispering that you love me.
And I know I don't have to say,
Because you already know,
That I love you, too.
Up the ladder:
The Green
Down the ladder:
Anger Management
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.0833335
Posted: May 11, 2002 8:41 PM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 8:41 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.329863 Overall Rank: 13078 Comments:
I think it's a good poem, but you might want to consider cutting the first line. The rest of the poem tells us that and you can trust the reader.
Too Hallmark for me, no depth.
isn't that sweet.guillotine.rivet.jar.herpes.bank
very heart-felt poem. I love how the words don't ryhme but the poems still flows.
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And see if ending the poem with the broken lines from the center does anything.
And furthermore you don't love me, you're just in love with my po-ems.