Yup, when I revise this one I'll cut out some of the abundant words. Thanks for the comment!

Ack ;p

I will have to agree; this is more or less a word-jam, made just to fiddle more with this clerk-character. The "metre" consists merely of syllable counting. If I get the time to revise this, I think I'll do as you say; vary the syllable count, and instead play with different metres! :)

Thanks! I'm not all that proficient with the use of punctuation in my poems.

I've understood as much :) That you don't really like the form that is. I find it refreshing writing sonnets though, so I'll keep at it! (for a time at least). As to perfect innocence. I'm not sure, but innocence in itself is a term loosely used. Perfect innocence though, that would like the epitome of the very concept. Then again, when I decide to write stuff like this, it will come out kinda, well, "ugh" for some. :D

Thanks, as always, for your thoughts. It's neat when someone disagrees with you!

True that. I switched on purpose though. Felt that tetrameter would do perfectly in the couplet :)

I don't really agree with scornful and grim being that similar. But I do, however, agree with you saying I've used some words to make the pentameter work. If I wanted to write modern stuff, I'd stick to wishy washy free verse, just jamming with words. Seeing as I'm not really skilled doing that, I'll keep fiddling with these older forms. That's the thing with writing in strict forms, it's not easy making it all slippery easy greasy to read. All over, I'm content though. If you have any suggestions as to make it better, I'll be happy to hear em :)

Quarrel, two syllables (QUARrel), no?

Agree on the "do"s as well. Adding the "now" in line 13 would mess up the pentameter though. Thanks! :)

Haha! I've been fixing that as you wrote your comment. Thanks a lot for for putting that to my attention. Haven't really taken time to work out the punctuation in these sonnets. Hope it's a bit better now?

Thank you for these points! I'll have to ponder hard on these internal rhymes which seem to be a problem in most my sonnets. To be honest, I'd completely forgotten the other way to pronounce "clerk". Darnit!

Hmh, deleted my previous comment; this sonnet was written tongue-in-cheek. The sullen poet is obviously not meant to be Poe. Both the title, and the message should be hints enough ;p

Think so too, to be honest. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll fixit methinks.

Thank you :)

I agree. Something to fiddle with for a while :)