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Villanelle № 148100

In sickness and in health

Member since 2006 · Posted 20 Nov 2006 · 4 comments

"We will, in sickness and in health", they said, Their eyes alight with rev'rent love and zeal And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread Resplendently he stood, his eyes ahead Beside his wife to be, her charm unreal "We will, in sickness and in health", they said He nodded stately to his guests, the dead She flashed a dimple at her father's squeal And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread The priest wore black to hide the tears he shed As words not his confirmed the final deal "We will, in sickness and in health", they said O' time itself stood still as vows were read Aghast as it cried out its last appeal And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread; For day turned night as Pure and Vile did wed, And doing, so they crushed the holy seal "We will, in sickness and in health", they said, And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread

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[7] Dovina 20-Nov-06/5:01 PM Reply
Pure and Vile must be their names. It seems the "sickness" theme should be developed, perhaps in relation to Vile.
[n/a] Schlinkey › Dovina 21-Nov-06/3:45 PM Reply
I agree. Something to fiddle with for a while :)
[9] Ranger 25-Nov-06/2:03 PM Reply
Good villanelle.
[n/a] Schlinkey › Ranger 26-Nov-06/9:50 AM Reply
Thank you :)