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In sickness and in health (Villanelle) by Schlinkey
"We will, in sickness and in health", they said, Their eyes alight with rev'rent love and zeal And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread Resplendently he stood, his eyes ahead Beside his wife to be, her charm unreal "We will, in sickness and in health", they said He nodded stately to his guests, the dead She flashed a dimple at her father's squeal And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread The priest wore black to hide the tears he shed As words not his confirmed the final deal "We will, in sickness and in health", they said O' time itself stood still as vows were read Aghast as it cried out its last appeal And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread; For day turned night as Pure and Vile did wed, And doing, so they crushed the holy seal "We will, in sickness and in health", they said, And hell did feast as heaven shrunk with dread

Up the ladder: Writer's Block
Down the ladder: All At Last

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7053
Posted: November 20, 2006 12:13 PM PST; Last modified: November 20, 2006 12:13 PM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 | 20-Nov-06/5:01 PM | Reply
Pure and Vile must be their names. It seems the "sickness" theme should be developed, perhaps in relation to Vile.
[n/a] Schlinkey @ 62.16.135.98 > Dovina | 21-Nov-06/3:45 PM | Reply
I agree. Something to fiddle with for a while :)
[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 25-Nov-06/2:03 PM | Reply
Good villanelle.
[n/a] Schlinkey @ 62.16.135.98 > Ranger | 26-Nov-06/9:50 AM | Reply
Thank you :)
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