| Re: Let's Grovel For Jesus And Fight The Naughty Satan! by Sing4Jesus! |
14-Oct-06/2:20 PM |
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| Re: A Poetry Reading by Dovina |
14-Oct-06/2:24 PM |
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The same content would make a decent poem if your verbs weren't so dull.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Oct-06/2:26 PM |
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This doesn't make any sense.:(
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Oct-06/2:43 PM |
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subtitle: If you are a cat and wish to be forgiven for killing birds do not cry at your mothers funeral.
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| Re: Timing by Dovina |
15-Oct-06/6:05 AM |
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This is really good. Not sure about layed. Should it be laid. I don't know.
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| Re: Bitter by Ranger |
15-Oct-06/6:09 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
24-Oct-06/8:06 AM |
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I understand this is a meditation on how money can buy things that take up more room than the money itself. The language is a bit prosaic. That is my only criticism.
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| Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus! |
24-Oct-06/8:16 AM |
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This is good. Apart from the last verse. The last verse is bollocks.
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| Re: The Day Habeas Corpus Died by Wakeboarder20 |
24-Oct-06/8:23 AM |
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I don't know why you argue that this poem has any subtlety. It doesn't. On the plus side it isn't too shoddy. I dont like the 'not as good as tv reality' line. I think it would work better if the narrator were watching something specific.
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| Re: Danger Zone by Miggy |
24-Oct-06/8:25 AM |
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Mature version of truth or dare sounds terrible. I much prefer it with a young filly.:(
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