on Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus!
24 Oct 2006, 8:16 AM
This is good. Apart from the last verse. The last verse is bollocks.
on Danger Zone by Miggy
24 Oct 2006, 8:25 AM
Mature version of truth or dare sounds terrible. I much prefer it with a young filly.:(
on some deleted poem
24 Oct 2006, 8:06 AM
I understand this is a meditation on how money can buy things that take up more room than the money itself. The language is a bit prosaic. That is my only criticism.
on The Day Habeas Corpus Died by Wakeboarder20
24 Oct 2006, 8:23 AM
I don't know why you argue that this poem has any subtlety. It doesn't. On the plus side it isn't too shoddy. I dont like the 'not as good as tv reality' line. I think it would work better if the narrator were watching something specific.
on Let's Grovel For Jesus And Fight The Naughty Satan! by Sing4Jesus!
14 Oct 2006, 2:20 PM
Jesus rocks.
on A Poetry Reading by Dovina
14 Oct 2006, 2:24 PM
The same content would make a decent poem if your verbs weren't so dull.
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2006, 2:26 PM
This doesn't make any sense.:(
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2006, 2:43 PM
subtitle: If you are a cat and wish to be forgiven for killing birds do not cry at your mothers funeral.