on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin
30 Dec 2005, 1:30 PM
delicately poised visuals. i can see the blossom's course, yet i do wonder why it ever lands... well done.
on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina
30 Dec 2005, 2:06 PM
ugh. hope i don't ever go there. ;p
i know i will live and die where ya get changes of seasons, too.
i know i will live and die where ya get changes of seasons, too.
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
30 Dec 2005, 2:12 PM
ok, i am sure that this was written before the premier of the TV show "Boston Legal", but Will Shatner's character (Denny Crane) comes to mind here.
well done, a riotous romp at pomp!
well done, a riotous romp at pomp!
on The Forgetting by Dovina
3 Jan 2006, 1:58 PM
i like the image, and the hint of living time in reverse (perhaps?). I am confounded however, by the last line; is "pasteless" a typo? or maybe this is a fanciful land where the collage of the child smelling a rose comes to life and "unpastes" himself...
quaint and lovely nonetheless, it stimulates conjecture.
quaint and lovely nonetheless, it stimulates conjecture.
as others have said, the reverse works for me. it also leads us in an interesting slow growth to the painful climax, and then a joyous denoument, and then the ominous ending lines...
the impending doom of the garden would itself make an interesting stage for another piece of writing.
sorry for the long comment. and sorry for your loss.