replying on Pandora's Box by PoeticXTC
21 Dec 2005, 12:53 PM
Thank You, Cyan9. I purposely did that so that the end could be strong and the reader could feel a change in power. I didn't want the middle stanzas to be too strong so that it overwhelmed the end feeling I am trying to get out of the readers.
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
20 Dec 2005, 9:06 PM
lol, nice poem...
on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
20 Dec 2005, 8:52 PM
Beautiful poem. I'mma sucker for love myself and this poem is the mirror image of my love for someone else. I truely loved this poem.
You have my heart at "..'til the light of me flicker-sighs-..."
You have my heart at "..'til the light of me flicker-sighs-..."
on Privacy Compromised by Dovina
20 Dec 2005, 8:45 PM
Lmao, Im tripping over your last line, krayz!!!
"Unmasking faith behind dogma dispelled-slipped hint's of me."- Curious as to what you meant by "... slipped hints of me."
"Unmasking faith behind dogma dispelled-slipped hint's of me."- Curious as to what you meant by "... slipped hints of me."
replying on Temptation by PoeticXTC
20 Dec 2005, 8:38 PM
With this poem I didn't want to get wordie. "He speaks the reconizable; my soul."- he speaks my soul, not to my soul. I do agree w/ 2 things you criticized, the semicolons were a bit much but to keep the lauguage of the poem strait and to the point, I had to use them. "Without Knowing; he speaks the language of my heart,..." was a honest mistake that I over looked.
replying on The Calling by PoeticXTC
20 Dec 2005, 8:32 PM
I was trying to create the image for my generations (My grandfathers' grand children and great grand children)perspective of our grandfather. They watch, they cry, they stand amazed, they keep watching.... that's what I was aiming for.