Re: nicholson by ay deee	19-Sep-05/1:08 PM
right on
Re: a comment on The Death of an Octopus by tianyi	16-Sep-05/7:32 PM
The Villanelle's done if you're interested.
Re: loud clubbin by ay deee	16-Sep-05/10:33 AM
The relationship between thick cut rug and invisible trousers is intriguing. Do you wear the rug like a large conical skirt? I enjoyed this.
Re: a comment on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	16-Sep-05/10:07 AM
Hahaha, that's great. Hehe. You just spoiled my own poem for me! The thing is, I probably say 'oh' a lot in real life too. And I'm a guy. You've got me questioning my sexuality.
Re: Unbroken Horses by Caducus	16-Sep-05/9:57 AM
I liked when she died face down on fresh linen. 'Beauty' was shot in the hind leg tried to stand three times but fell. But all in all not enough insight or images that will stick in my mind. It reads like hopelessly melancholic list of how crap things are. "Grandma's dead, I'm a bastard, Grandpa shot my horse, Grandpa's dead" Perhaps just focus on one of these.
Re: a comment on The Death of an Octopus by tianyi	16-Sep-05/9:40 AM
Thanks, im working on a Villanelle in a similar vein.
Re: a comment on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	16-Sep-05/4:18 AM
Cannery Row? *Googles* "Novel by John Steinbeck, published in 1945. Like most of Steinbeck's postwar work, Cannery Row is sentimental in tone while retaining the author's characteristic social criticism. Peopled by stereotypical good-natured bums and warm-hearted prostitutes living on the fringes of Monterey, Calif., the picaresque novel celebrates lowlifes who are poor but happy." I've never heard of it, but I'll take the extra points!
Re: a comment on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	15-Sep-05/4:51 PM
Wow, thankyou very much!
Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8	15-Sep-05/4:47 PM
yes
Re: a comment on Tall Windows by tianyi	13-Sep-05/2:48 AM
I just added the comma without thinking to hard about it.