Re: Ain,t Life Fuckin Great,(part2 The Stone Man) by Bethy	4-Aug-05/11:21 AM
wow... ain't life full of saddness and then we hear their cries... that was awsome! loved it Penny
Re: Drops of Pain by PoeticOne	3-Aug-05/11:39 PM
I like the general concept.. maybe just look it over again and see if you can wrap it up and put some finishing touches on this master piece.... peace Penny
Re: In My Words by RGSsparky	3-Aug-05/11:36 PM
cool... just spit those words out and smash them against a rock and see what ya get .. cute very cute Penny
Re: The Shape of Shadows by MacFrantic	1-Aug-05/11:47 AM
I really really like this V1: Inside of us all A lingering loneliness After the fall I'm sure it will find us Of this I'm... Breaking away Finding a darker place [FINDING A DARKENED PLACE] Finding some shade where I can Rest my head and rest my anger Chorus: You know it's true The truth that makes my blood turn black You know it's true And if I could I'd give the truth right back [I LOVE THESE 2] Finding all the broken corners Where you left us all behind To save yourself From the darkness The shape of shadows in your mind V2: Lead me today Follow the road that cuts my heels Far and away I'm sure we'll escape now Of this I'm... Lying in silence Fearful of sight and pain[FEARFUL OF MY INVASIVE PAIN] Finding the point where all these Ghosts came from to walk in my dreams [ THIS NEEDS A LITTLE WORK IT DOESN'T FLOW WELL] SEARCHING FOR THE POINT, ALL THESE GHOSTS INVADED OR CRASHED MY DREAMS hope I could help.. this was very good Penny
Re: she sits back and judges me by hendrimike	1-Aug-05/11:35 AM
maybe needs a little more descriptive wording to get a really good mental picture penny
Re: Life is not serious by daggatolar	1-Aug-05/11:33 AM
wow, so true how many blame God first then other people places and things... forgiveness is the way to heaven? makes one think about the bitterness eating at the hearts of many indiviguals.. great Penny
Re: writers block by Jesus' Pedometer	1-Aug-05/11:25 AM
lol...we are all there some deeper then others.. let each word flow till they fill the page Penny
Re: More drugs. by darby pyn	1-Aug-05/11:22 AM
oh I hope that you are not talking from experience.. but if you are this is very vivid and very emotional.. been there on the other side of the fit and I no it's no fun actually it's pretty scary stuff.. but well done in description! Penny