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she sits back and judges me (Free verse) by hendrimike
and then i open the door sitting on the leather she ponders and i stroll past her quickly feeling eyes penetrating my life and i close my door and i hear her head attack me and i fall asleep and sleep is a mirage to life

Up the ladder: Land of Promises
Down the ladder: What I Wouldn't Give

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7780
Posted: July 15, 2005 4:21 PM PDT; Last modified: July 31, 2005 12:45 PM PDT
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[9] Dovina @ 66.235.60.64 | 18-Jul-05/6:15 AM | Reply
an angry rant, nothing more.
[n/a] hendrimike @ 70.106.117.116 > Dovina | 18-Jul-05/10:54 AM | Reply
yup, that's it...on a whim and pissed
[n/a] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.21.224 | 20-Jul-05/12:38 PM | Reply
f me for reading this.
[n/a] hendrimike @ 70.18.179.39 > Bankrupt_Word_Clerk | 31-Jul-05/12:46 PM | Reply
i completely changed this poem from it's early days of f you f you f you to this...i don't know if it is better, but whatever
[9] Dovina @ 85.169.62.90 | 1-Aug-05/8:41 AM | Reply
I feel it. Good.
[5] pennymarie @ 4.246.108.16 | 1-Aug-05/11:35 AM | Reply
maybe needs a little more descriptive wording to get a really good mental picture

penny
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