Poemranker [Poem: none] [by poetrybutterfly] Thu Nov 21 21:57:50 PST 2024

the first day the virgin sky is blue and white is the cloud the first man blank the first sun shined and shines now but the stars fell leaving a black emptiness.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7765

Posted: June 16, 2004 2:28 PM PDT; Last modified: June 16, 2004 2:28 PM PDT
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[5] god'swife @ 4.232.201.240 | 22-Jun-04/12:11 PM | Reply

Could you change 'but' to 'though' or some such thing?

I don't understand the title.

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