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none (Free verse) by poetrybutterfly
the first day the virgin sky is blue and white is the cloud the first man blank the first sun shined and shines now but the stars fell leaving a black emptiness.
Up the ladder: You and I
Down the ladder: How To Fish
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7815
Posted: June 16, 2004 2:28 PM PDT; Last modified: June 16, 2004 2:28 PM PDT
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[5] god'swife @ 4.232.201.240 | 22-Jun-04/12:11 PM | Reply
Could you change 'but' to 'though' or some such thing?

I don't understand the title.
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