Re: i'm falling for u damnit! by clumseYdaiseY	18-Jun-05/8:58 PM
Most of the rhymes are forced and there are a few grammar issues. Elimate the metaphors that don't work and you might yet become an e e cummings.
Re: A scarce flower~ by clumseYdaiseY	18-Jun-05/9:09 PM
The first 4 verses were excellent. That's exactly the level of abstraction that best suits your style. You can often make a stronger point by allow the reader to think about where you may be coming from in your life with your writing than you do when you spell it out for them.
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	18-Jun-05/9:14 PM
I think "BIG EGO" or "BIG PENIS" is implied somewhere. I almost missed the last line. I rated the poem high, but I like political and social work more than most people.
Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	18-Jun-05/9:19 PM
Trite in places with a couple forced rhymes, but overall very expressive. I probably shouldn't have rated this since I tend to be a little harsh on love poems.
Re: ~Witchcraft~ by Lenore	18-Jun-05/9:24 PM
Sweet! Nice rhythm. The rhymes work. The images are vivid.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined	18-Jun-05/9:44 PM
Try "time worn smooth by emery" and you have a very tight, almost technically perfect piece.
Re: I Go On by drumrgirl30	19-Jun-05/12:16 PM
The problem with beginning a poem with rhymes is that you set your reader up to expect them. When you broke the last line, you disturbed those expectations. That is fine if it is deliberate, but you need tighter verse and better rhythm to convince the reader that you didn't simply make a mistake.
Re: After The Years Howl By by Lenore	19-Jun-05/12:20 PM
Could be tighter with more active voice, but bitter-sweet with good foreshadowing. Nice.
Re: "The Buick", or, "to my grandfather" by david	19-Jun-05/12:27 PM
This is what free verse should be. There's a story that is being told by the images rather than exposited by the narrator, there are emotions being conveyed rather than explained, and there is a certain trust in the readers that they should determine for themselves if there are lessons, values or judgements to be made from the scene.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Jun-05/2:33 PM
You have the syllable count right and assuming that the poem is about something in nature gives a plausible interpretation. That gives you 2 out of 3 elements of a haiku. It lacks beauty.