Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/4:48 PM
I’m glad you understand it that way. Everyone does not, and that, too, is alright. I chose an expository method (telling) over story or metaphor (showing) and don’t find that’s always bad.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/4:47 PM
ecargo, or anyone else, is not likely to disagree that something in the Bible means something to me. He/she would, I believe, think that I should not feel that way about it, and might even say so. (If this discussion were happening on his/her poem, it would have all been deleted by now.) Someday, I will say what something in the Bible means to me, I’m sure of it, in some future poem or comment. But my purpose in this poem is simply to show that imagery in the Bible is very common, and to imply that someone thought it was a good way of communicating.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/3:46 PM
You have a way of summarizing that’s uncanny sometimes, and dyslexically dim at others. Sorry to sound blunt, but I mean it as compliment. It’s a foolish alchemist who makes unalloyed gold. Without the corruption of inferior mettle, gold is soft and unsubstantial. I don’t evaluate metals the way a jeweler with microscope glasses does. I rely on shine and feel, and the feel of this is right. It’s also right here: http://poemranker.com/comment-recent.jsp?showall=false&skip=6 27-Jan-06/3:16 AM
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/3:16 PM
I disagree, because my interpretations would only anger you. It's better to let it stand uninterpreted, unstoried into my life in particular.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/3:06 PM
Yeah, the crown of thorns analogy is good. My purpose was rebuttal to michael_d’s recent rant about contradictions in the Bible, and to show appreciation for the metaphor and image usage throughout that interesting book. It’s so full of stories that any I write would likely be mere rewordings or take-offs.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/2:58 PM
To signal appreciation. I made it no more beautiful than it was, and probably less.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/2:57 PM
I don't mean to degrade the man any more than Daniel did.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/12:32 PM
Thanks, I intended to add nothing, but slipped in a few places.
Re: Giving in to a boring suggestion by Joe-joe	31-Jan-06/12:03 PM
lol. It took me awhile to get the "awl" but it works. "a martyr" should be "martyrs."
Re: a comment on more of the same by calliope	31-Jan-06/11:38 AM
Sorry, I mean, "I like this . . ."
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/11:34 AM
Thanks, Ranger. Funny how a verse repulses some and enthralls others. Just as many passages in the Bible do.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/11:34 AM
But the last verse takes away the “wolf in sheep’s clothing” image that everyone has of me. (So many of our clichés come from the Bible.) The four uses of “hear” are redundant, yes, but the idea is so prevalent in the Bible that I wanted to emphasize it. Thanks, I appreciate your comments.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	31-Jan-06/11:34 AM
“Weighed in the balance and found wanting,” like Nebuchadnezzar. I stripped away the preaching from the Bible, but not from my own work.
Re: yo yo yo, ride by FreeFormFixation	30-Jan-06/5:08 PM
This would be a 10 if it made less sense. Some good lines, but they're mixed with ramparts of regret and other concludable free form fixations.
Re: necrobos by baphomet	30-Jan-06/5:02 PM
I must be crazy to say this conveys anything, but except for her being "teen to b" it does.
Re: Time, Indeterminate by ecargo	30-Jan-06/4:57 PM
She hasn't much to send him, or much to buy it with, and when the baby comes, she'll have less. Still, her poems he passes 'round, and keeps the whale's picture she found the money to sponser. "What a woman!" I hear him say.
Re: let me know by skaskowski	30-Jan-06/4:42 PM
May I rent one of the forgotten rooms in your delightful-sounding house? It must be a fine place to thrash through the sewers looking for all the lost keys I've swallowed.
Re: more of the same by calliope	30-Jan-06/12:43 PM
And, speaking for the forum, we do forgive - forgive "a myriad" when myriad would do, forgive that you mean "myriad words." But I lit this, the thought of it.
Re: a comment on Glitterati by ecargo	30-Jan-06/12:07 PM
What happened to the other comments?
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	28-Jan-06/12:21 PM
Thanks, but I'm toying with a revision to improve the meter and rhyme. Maybe thei: Born under Aries, you can call me ewe Rams batter (I’m flattered) bruising brothers with butts to garner my favor I bleat for the black one roll eyes at the spotted then gloat as their heads collide all the harder If they knew what I want they’d give up the fight build nests like the thrush and sing at first light I’d examine their dwellings for comfort and view hear scratchings of ramhorns then bleat, maybe coo But my suitors keep butting like blood-sucking fleas who plant killer germs in animals they need Why can’t these rams go to work and stay busy gather nuts like the squirrel suck nectar like bees? And remember when they like this lamb at my side though gone far as the salmon come home with the tide We could flee this herd mate softly in peace shun sheep without vision who can fight if they please