Re: a comment on The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	Bethy 24.222.32.220	23-Aug-05/5:25 PM
Awww Thanks AL...and your right...I love Erma's words...my friends and I call HIM... "Needle Dick the Bug Fucker"...but it was hard to fit it into my poem...Whaaaa...! :) Bethy hehheehe ha!
Re: a comment on The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	Bethy 24.222.32.220	23-Aug-05/5:20 PM
Thank you INTRANSIT...gosh darn right...lol...:) Bethy
Re: Letter from Palermo by Caducus	patty t 70.30.211.173	23-Aug-05/4:50 PM
I want to go to Palermo and beat the crap out of somebody or give them all roses
Re: The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	Dovina 12.72.29.16	23-Aug-05/3:50 PM
When you say ":) :)" in the title, I wonder if it's tongue-in-cheek. As I read, I think not. Maybe :-( And "Stupid" means something like "Arogant" Shave your legs, girl, put on a dress, and have a drink. That's what I do.
Re: The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	23-Aug-05/1:53 PM
Kind of an Erma Bombeck rant. Dink will get a laugh no matter where you use it. Most men will turn Big Dink into a complement. It's just the way our egos work. He didn't deserve a poem anyway.
Re: a comment on Letter from Palermo by Caducus	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	23-Aug-05/1:53 PM
Yes. We had a cat named Joe. Nicknamed him Giuseppe.
Re: The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	23-Aug-05/1:51 PM
mostly normal stuff. Stealing Dr. Hook is worth goin' after him for.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	23-Aug-05/12:36 PM
I also misspelled "infinite" and "separates".
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	23-Aug-05/12:27 PM
Thanks D. I'm a notorious misspeller but even that one embarrasses me.
Re: Letter from Palermo by Caducus	Dovina 12.72.24.164	23-Aug-05/12:22 PM
I like the somber rhythm. Wish you'd spell out linoleum.
Re: Letter from Palermo by Caducus	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	23-Aug-05/12:19 PM
Powerful stuff but "rubbing herself till I cried." was kinda creepy.
Re: a comment on Leaving the Woods House by zodiac	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	23-Aug-05/12:09 PM
Actually I think it might need to be phrased "nor on tenterhooks"
Re: i need a title by That One	Katie 199.201.190.5	23-Aug-05/11:56 AM
Aren't Sonnets suppose to have 10 syllables in each line?!
Re: Letter from Palermo by Caducus	Sasha 68.49.8.49	23-Aug-05/11:06 AM
Hurts my brain, but worth it
Re: Leaving the Woods House by zodiac	Caducus 172.213.93.104	23-Aug-05/7:49 AM
I second what alchemy said and this is an awesome piece of writing - definitely in the top 10 I've read on here and elsewhere. Last line should be tenderhooks
Re: Leaving the Woods House by zodiac	Dovina 12.72.22.125	23-Aug-05/7:47 AM
I hate the restrictions of the sonnet form. But I guess if you give up the stricter Shakespearean ties, then its much easier. I think "we" would be better in "You let it go" to keep it personal. You could drop "ours" in "and then it wasn't ours" What are tenterhooks? The colons distract. Periods would be better. I would make the sex more tender in keeping with the nostalgia of the occasion.
Re: Pity Her by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	23-Aug-05/7:44 AM
If this is you, then back off from poetry for a while. If not, then crank out another one.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	Dovina 12.72.22.125	23-Aug-05/7:37 AM
Be careful! He could hit you with wisdom like, "Yes, but have you ever noticed that I'm an atheist and I can spell right correctly, while, whatever you believe, you can't?"
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	Dovina 12.72.22.125	23-Aug-05/7:33 AM
Then you have at least one belief.
Re: a comment on How Angels Sleep by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.22.125	23-Aug-05/7:28 AM
re “nor”: I see your point about the wording and agree that yours is clearer. But I want to stress that she has an emotion (feeling) concerning the hand below her rib, not just a physical feeling. The angel might understand the physical feeling, but not the emotion. The poem is whimsical and non-doctrinal, as we have both said. So why are you bring the Bible into it? The last verse is a metaphor for a man, and the whole poem could be interpreted that way. Since I’ve used the plural, angels, throughout the poem, it seems fair to say in the last verse that one particular angel (or man) is different from the others. Therefore the man/angel has not changed his nature. Maybe I could make that more clear. Thanks for your comments.