Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	1-Mar-06/4:46 PM
Beware The Darth Anal P.I. I shall.
Re: a comment on There by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.138	1-Mar-06/4:44 PM
You probably told her that God can't make plastic. And she probably said He can, just ask Dovina. And you probably said Dovina is is unqualified to say. And she probably said, "Dovina has a plastic crucifix." So take that an admit to being ovulated.
Re: a comment on A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	1-Mar-06/4:44 PM
And believe me, she knows the difference between a young cock and an old one. Sorry D, couldn't resist the joke:)
Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	Dovina 17.255.240.138	1-Mar-06/4:41 PM
with you, the force is. But of the dark side beware. Angels dark, that is.
Re: A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger	Dovina 17.255.240.138	1-Mar-06/4:38 PM
The title is very appealing, but the delivery? - well. He is apparently like Atlas, has his own telescope, but unlike telescopes, his is not a receiver of light, but a beacon lit. "Thin gold ring"? - brass maybe. Cocerels are young male chickens, which do not crow like the roosters they become. Still, the astronomer dying at dawn is a good image, which perhaps you can build upon.
Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	1-Mar-06/4:35 PM
The most Yoda-esque comment ever I've read on this site that is. How's that?
Re: a comment on There by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	1-Mar-06/4:33 PM
The ultimate meaning in life is that we are greater than God because God can't make plastic. Amanda is right (about all the stuff she said about you behind your back.) Don't bother asking, I'll never tell.
Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	Dovina 17.255.240.138	1-Mar-06/4:25 PM
An un-Yodaesque comment that is.
Re: A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	1-Mar-06/4:23 PM
What's a "rosehip mist"? I looked it up and this is what I got: http://www.nzpacific.com/details.php?id=185&which=product I dont think "prism" is the right word. A prism is the object that devides the light, not the rainbow of color. You could try maybe Prismacolor which is a brand name but it basically means a rainbow of color. You could also say kaleidoscope or polychrome. The rest is really good.
Re: a comment on There by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.138	1-Mar-06/4:23 PM
I did that years ago, almost in a former life, by lying in the sand at Long Beach. No, face it, all is vanity. There is nothing new under the sun.
Re: a comment on There by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.138	1-Mar-06/4:17 PM
Having arrived at the ultimate meaning for your life, may I suggest giving up. Yes, admit that amanda_dcosta was right all along.
Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	1-Mar-06/3:24 PM
That's the most Yoda-esque comment I've ever read on this site.
Re: the disadvantages of dropping out by FreeFormFixation	INTRANSIT 12.109.26.194	1-Mar-06/3:05 PM
Soo close, here. I wish I hadthe time.
Re: Simon's Legacy (draft) by Caducus	INTRANSIT 12.109.26.194	1-Mar-06/3:00 PM
"Draft" o' the day. Cheers!
Re: There by Dovina	zodiac 66.230.117.83	1-Mar-06/1:17 PM
Maybe you should pick a different "there". Yours sounds like it sucks, but that's no reason to give up on theres in general.
Re: a comment on A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger	Ranger 62.252.32.15	1-Mar-06/12:30 PM
Yep - you've picked up on the two lines I wasn't sure about myself...the 'he now looks' line is particularly frustrating, but an alternative will present itself (I hope). The astronomer I might keep, it was the foundation for this one and I'm a sentimental fool... I read various of your poems to get a good feeling for rhythm before writing this up!
Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	Ranger 62.252.32.15	1-Mar-06/12:22 PM
Thank you! I'm at the tender age of nineteen right now...as I said to Dovina, poemranker really did suffer during my Pimple-loving time; but I learnt such a lot from here that I left for a couple of years until I had anything worthwhile to offer - ideas are starting to return to me at last! It's all about learning stylistic tricks now - there is so much fantastic poetry on this site that I'm learning every time I log in. Your comment made my day, by the way! Thank you once again!
Re: A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14	1-Mar-06/12:20 PM
I almost whoop aloud at the places you go! I would change>he now looks Needs something more refined, there. At rereading, I thought, the cock could have said so many different things, and I would have liked it as much. Another romantic dies at dawn. etc, etc:)
Re: a comment on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.13	1-Mar-06/12:14 PM
OH! You are young? I wouldn't have guessed you are that young, as all the discussion implies you are. Well...then... KEEP writing! Sheesh...so much potential, you have. I must admit I find your stuff to be brain food, even in its imperfect state. Highly intellegent stuff and processes going on and around in that head of yours...most refreshing!
Re: You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14	1-Mar-06/12:07 PM
Oh, and, I like the alternate title the best...if I had to vote.